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It is not acid ...

It is not acid ...

not its sour thorn

on the tongue

 

smarts my eyes;

nor some faint disappointment

like a guardian moth

 

tracing some opiate poison

on the canvas of old bones

under old skin in lethal ambience.

 

It is lithe poetics of green

tree snakes, twisting their tight

symmetry in silence

 

or your verses, forgotten with mine,

locked up, rusted through

in cabinets of lines lurking

 

along pathways of a mind

that is not snake swift.

Yes, these poems, once familiars

 

like soft tree frogs,

spring with life-energy

and vigilant vitality

 

or clumsily hold fast

like cranky old toads

clambering on swamp logs.

 

It is not acid ...

nor its fierce embers

that yawn tired prayers.

 

It is not acid ...

nor its rough sands

in the throat

 

but the grip, tight to my neck

of the sense of my library,

an exhibition of thousands

 

piled to the ceiling

and my name

not on one cover.

 

It is not acid ...

nor its sour burn

only, but truth ...

 

a midnight hubris sketch

playing, Too late old fellow

and dislodged dust falls

 

from dry parchments

primed with child dreams

and bad poetry

 

decaying line by line,

phrase by peripheral phrase

to the place all words go ...

 

eventually.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Free Verse that portrays many of us at Allpoetry: we who shall never become household names for the quality of our verse. Yet we try.
Prompt:
Use ten of: embers; exhibition; ambience [often spelt "ambiance"]; peripheral; child; thorn; sketch; hold fast; moth; guardian; canvas; yawn; prayer; sands; opiate.

I USED EACH WORD IN THE ABOVE POEM. THAT IS, THE 15 given.

Upper limit to lines = 50 lines. [No. of lines in this poem = 49.]

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Comments

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  • Todays Poem Box
    February 1

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    Excellent job with the word bank!
    15/15 words used.
    Great imagery. Excellent subject choice!
    Thanks for entering and best of luck!
    Write on.
    ~*~


    • Lyndon gold member
      February 1
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      Thank you for the inspiration and trophy.

      Congratulations to the Gold and Silver trophy winners.
      Ron.


  • Lady Altheia
    January 17

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    It is nice to see you writing again. We only become household names in our own house. Don't you think? Best of luck to you in your future writes.

  • Wow its very good and true. Most of us may never see our names on the side of a book although i think most of us here would greatly enjoy seeing it. But most of us are content that our own works of art are being read and in striving for the honor of being published we push ourselves to improve.


  • Melodies
    January 17

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    An amazing poem written from a word bank list, which surprised me, for the poem speaks beautifully and sounds like the words came from the poet's mind so naturally.

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