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Odysseus's Dilemma

Faith, that unholy of trinities would
Hold well in the bowels of some,
Where the arrows are shielded gallantly
Without question nor remorse.
Where the trials of disparate souls
Would weaken the many,
Few stand - proud of their insanity.
When the certainty of principle,
Justice or morality cannot be purged,

But rather protected without malice.

An odd thing?
Where green specks are no
More shoots of recovery than
The newt that signals great health.
Rather jades of jealousy
That would tear blissfully
At the joy of Love, Faith and Friendship.

Therein the dilemma, to wander
Hopefully or aimlessly.
Both journeys equal
But for the spirit of the traveller
And the heart of home.

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  • Lute
    February 3

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    The system was breaking down. The one who had wandered alone past so many happenings and events began to feel, backing up along the primal vein that led to his center, the beginning of a hiccup that would, if left to gather, explode the center to the extremities of life, the suburbs through which one makes one's way to where the country is.

    ashberry, the system.

    Us bright specks! Brief candles screaming at the void. (heh), a niche in the Galactic Library where the collected works are stored on a microdot would be nice.

    dismal, ain't I? Still, one is reminded to keep one's commas proper in the face of the eternal flames.


  • cvillelisa
    January 20
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    I'm a sucker for an Odysseus pome - because indeed we all have a part of him in us ...

    I am partial to Stanza 2 & 3. Had you considered beginning with Stanza 2 then Stanza 1 ?

    Just a sort of different way to look at it -- that S2 is a hook for me.

    Lisa