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Tammy

Tammy

i.
Childly youth surrounded her innocent mind,
full of rose petal dreams,

ii.
Father never came home..
until one day, with his new 'girl'

Mother cried....

iii.
....and disappeared,
but Tammy stayed.
and clouds of loneliness hovered..

iv.
the years grew by,
memories draped like curtains,

memories of darkness.

 

{spreading across the kitchen table} 

 

v.

Tammy hung from the ceiling- like a chandelier,

only she had no light within.

only darkness.

 

vi.

surrendered, in a room that once

represented her childly mind

of hopes and dreams. 

 

vii.

[yet her father couldn’t care less]  

 

Author notes

my name prompt was 'Tammy'
This isnt my usual style.. i hope its ok!

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  • Ah..you have touched one by one the truth and shared the sentiments of it with this piece..verywelldone..and thanks for sharing...


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    January 30

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    This is a perfect piece, I was just a little distracted by the fact that this was done in vignette form when all the stanza's followed on from one another it made them a little redunadant but it gave it something new. I enjoyed this and her and the way you brought her to life so well. I have a father just like this. Best to you in the contest