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The subway tracks

The subway tracks:
I wish to walk along them,
and realize that they are not anything but concrete.
Only that they are fleshed out with
the threat of a train.

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  • redbird
    January 17
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    cool.


    • cinderellahips
      January 17

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      thanks!

      your journal entries by the way prompted me to dig out my old diary, which i then spent a couple hours in intense laughter over.

      at the time i didnt realize that ciao was an italian greeting, and thought it was actually an acronym for some branch of the government.
      this lead to confusion and also the fact that i ended every entry with "chow for now"