blood
circles
the brain as
a hungry shark
amygdala pulse
slithering sensation
cognitive dissonance from
this forbidden exultation.
what you know and what you want differ.
a jackknife twist pitches me clear from the
murky water hosting the duel
wraiths of zebra-stripe shadows
fall on me as omens
yet, the gallows-cries:
carrion-crows
in my heart
eying
me
with
silent
suspicious
expectation.
storm-born jackal-wolf
running loose in the herds;
ethics don't fill empty guts.
despite all protests and struggles
murder draws me in with hook in mouth.
Author notes
I suffer from an unusual form of OCD which causes me to have violent compulsions and obsessions. I have it mostly under control with medical cannabis, but I'm poor and my life is unpredictably stressful for all kinds of reasons. When stress goes up, my symptoms re-manifest, especially when I can't afford enough medicine to get by. It's been getting nasty again on that level lately, though thankfully the psychosis that used to go with it is still gone. It's not dangerous anymore but I still feel like I'm being dragged to a place I don't really want to go ... or do I? It's hard to tell sometimes...
This is definitely the motivation option.
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um ok so the poem is great no doubt....but its apparent you didnt read the rules as far as what I require so I am going to have to remove it. thanks tho for sharing a great piece.
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I did actually read the rules. I could have sworn I added the AN thing, though it doesn't seem to have actually gone through. Either I'm misremembering or it glitched. Either way, if that was the only problem, you could just have prompted me to fix the AN, you know. I looked at the rules again and I really don't see anything else that would have violated them.
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it doesnt rhyme. i said they must rhyme.
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*blink* Was that there originally? I always look closely for "must rhyme" rules precisely because I don't write it. That's bizarre. Oh well then. Sorry about that!
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lol yes it was. its ok. like i said its a great poem. just not something that held my attention tho. i always like rhyming better cuz it holds the attention better.
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See, I like rhyme ... when it's done well. And I'm self-aware enough to know that I usually don't do it well. I also think people have this cliche idea about poetry that it *has* to rhyme, which I like to demolish. That's just me though. Good luck with the contest.
I might try to come up with something that rhymes for it if there's time just to stretch myself... hmmm.
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i agree. ive expermented with freeverse and i think my rhyming j
just comes out so much better. take a look at my other contest the link is in this. i think my rules on that contest are rhyme or
freeverse.
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Okay, your prompt is the quote:
"Evil can be attractive. Evil can be alluring. We want the monster to die, to kill the undead-but at the same time we are fascinated with it."-Matthew J. Costello
Take it whatever way you want! Good luck.
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Done btw.
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That was a horribly amusing convergence of prompt and poet. If I didn't know better I'd think you did that deliberately.
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