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Vision, Honey

i had a vision i was on
the pebble beach and
all i could see was flames.
then a fly as big my penis came.

i met a girl with blue blue eyes
and i didn't even know her name
she made me hot and bothered
made my feet sweat all over
and in between her legs were bear-traps, baby.

my stomach growled
my eyebrows furrowed
my intestines coiled like snakes and hissed
i looked in her eyes
i watched her smile,
crow's feet nesting near eyes, now her breasts

her mouth wandered closer
like i was honey and she the comb
and we kissed. . .
we kissed...

a fly flew by, buzzing softly in my ear
and i woke up on the beach
in the very same position
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as the haziness cleared
and the clouds in the sky appeared,
i was a million miles away; oh honey,
i was a million miles away.

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