I can't find myself again
I'm basking in what seems
like a broken record of mistakes
repeating themselves
over and over again.
Trying to figure out
just where one belongs
while reaching for help
in an unknown place.
Denying myself
the honesty I know
I hold inside
but just can't reach
deep enough to find it.
Creating what seems like
a failure to launch
I remember the sweet
smell of decadence
that shadows my
already over flown cup.
Peace be with me
as I search for the fallen
pray for the broken
reach for the stolen
and deny all reason.
Please tell me what you think
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the last stanza are good words to live by ... to go beyond the conceptual self and to once again arrive ...
thanks.
p.s. already been here and still enjoyed the write a second time.
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fantastic.
you more than deserved to be today's feature.
congradulations ! : D * -
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Interesting rhyme scheme. nice usage of the senses to invoke image. The last stanzq is the best.
Peace be with me
as I search for the fallen
pray for the broken
reach for the stolen
and deny all reason.
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i love this poem. Very touching. Owsum way of writing.
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wow your words have such gravity... especially the ending is very... you know it reaches out to touch the heart, for it ends on a very optimistic note. A search... within and without is all we do in life and you have captured the whole phenomena in an impeccable write.
great write. congrats on the feature.
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wow..that was amazing.. i hope you find everything your looking for.
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You Are Featured
Hello & good morning!
I found this piece quite deep, a lot of painful searching within, and a glimpse of hope at the end. Very nicely done & a pleasure to read.
It seems that this was written quite some time ago, and that you hadn't written since ~ so I'm hoping that it being Today's Featured Poem will help kickstart that muse of yours! We're looking to see more from you.
Thanks for sharing and keep writing!
~ Tim
Today's Poem
November 2, 2009
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nice
Just stop by to say it was a interesting peace....I like it...sad,vivid, and somehow nostalgic.
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Wow! What an amazing poem!
This is such a deep poem, and my favorite part is...
I'm basking in what seems
like a broken record of mistakes
repeating themselves
over and over again.
AND
Creating what seems like
a failure to launch
I remember the sweet
smell of decadence
that shadows my
already over flown cup.
What an impeccable write!
Sincerely,
~Trill~
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very good! loved the ending of this... so much to relate.... good job!
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Great work putting this write together!
Keep up the wonderful work here and thanks
a lot for sharing it!
Jeremy0826 -
the entire write just speaks so vividly but the last stanza is just incredible ... such weight.
thanks.
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a beautiful sadness in soul and life searching...I am sure we all have felt this way. Nice writing...
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Your prayer at the end from your searching heart brings a sincere way to encapsulate this write...A penning from the heart which always has a beauty of its own...
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this is a beautifully written piece
the last stanza brings everything together
you are featured on todays poem well done Poet!
Peace be with me
as I search for the fallen
pray for the broken
reach for the stolen
and deny all reason.
Blessings
Rend
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AMAZING! All the ay through...what more can I say...simply beautiful.
mystic
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Best i have hurd in a while
The wording is magnificent, it entised me in more as it went on
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