Please hear my birdsong arrive in your ears
singing your praises with joy and with glee
lilting through mornings that carry the breeze
wishing today I could sing.
Please find my feathers alive at your door
tickling your wares with my fancy free
spinning the sky into soaring embrace
wishing today I could fly.
Please know my heart hears the beat of your own
blending with patience and care from my soul
shining with pride for the love given you
wishing today I could live.
Author notes
Prompt: Oh God ! make me a bird, bless me to fly, towards you...Unknown.
A contest entry
- make me a bird... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended January 22, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Nicely written Pamela, beautiful imagery. Good job of working with the prompt. Thanks for sharing.
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Who could wish for more!!! This seems to have that sense of floating on a breeze! Your wishes have indeed taken flight!!!
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The thoughtful and beautiful one is this piece..thanks ..
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Its these short writes that are sweet to read as
well as carry the message clearly..loved it
Good
luck in the contest.
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Understated and elegant, simple and pure. Beautifully done, poet.
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As always
a beautiful poem of loning, of prayer, and of blessing. While the longing, there is also the giving, the unselfish, the sharing. Enjoyed the softness that was expressed. Blessing to you. Frans
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none other than perfection with the prompt. as usual, you amaze with your words. i've been amiss at reading.
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awww, birds fly free, wherever they want to go. I wish I can fly. Good luck to you in the contest and best ofluck in your future writes.
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I love the metre
...it has an unusual beat, yet makes a flowing rhythm. That makes your poem like a piece of music, especially with the repeat.
This lilting melody gives feeling to the bird theme and sets a wonderful tone. The bird 'feeling' is there in the song of the words.
So, I hear your bird song across the waves and I enjoy the nightingale music you sing. -
Lovely Pam
Though it does not rhyme this is so lovely.
Jim
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Beautiful piece on the given prompt. How nice it would be to be a bird and fly off wherever you want to. Good luck in this contest
C
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Great interpretation of the prompt. Good luck in the contest!
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What a beautiful piece of poetry you have written.
The imagery and flow is soft and comforting.
This is well written lifting the spirit in song.
Thanks for sharing your poetic talent.
Tony
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