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The Child Hopes... The Woman Knows

 

 

Restless wind carries intermittent sighs,
little sad-edged parcels frayed by time;
each one searching for a cleft within a lost soul.

Peat bog seeps stealthily through pimpled skin,
lifting hairs rigid, meeting dew clad drops
as they fall from limpid, staring eyes.

Choir-ed voices long ensconced within marbled walls
echo prayerful sonnet toward ivy-clad relics of ancient myth,
donors of alchemy doused in riveted spores.

Beliefs rooted in shadowy prisms bow before the moon,
raven, ragged wisps cling to bare shoulder,
hands settle in acquiesce.

Resignation seated before hopeless odds,
stalwart in view of all denunciation,
coupled in hope of truth.

The child hopes....  the woman knows,
earth, sky, light, dark,
whispers persist for a time... then die.

 

 

 

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  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    January 25

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    Your word choice is really amazing. I loved the second stanza the most, it made me cold and I felt such pain for her.

    Thank you for entering my contest and good luck

    Shari


    • wishintreeUK
      January 27
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      Thank you Miss Faerie for your upbuilding comments on my entry, I do appreciate it.

      Katie


  • heartnsoul
    January 16

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    The vision that is in my head is of a woman and child sitting upon fresh earth with tears running down a solitary headstone with the hands in prayer catching the drops. Yet a deep sense of foreboding is ever present.
    I started to write a comment before I had checked out the contest. As soon as the first picture came across my screen I just knew this had to be the prompt you used. Looking at the author in your notes......ah.... I'm write. You have captured the graphic most perfectly Katie! Stunning, just stunning. The feeling one gets from viewing the graphic and your poem, wow... This poem should be sent to the author of the graphic, I imagine the author would be most honored.
    Its been a long time since I've seen you last...I do hope to see more of you.
    Most affectionately,
    Michelle
    ps... have you heard from Sammy? Its been an awful long time since I've heard from him.