calm the quiet.
your silence is too rushed
I prefer the emptiness of noise
sound. slow distraction
the circle and the void;
never long encumbered by my
crutch
I always think in quiet
too much
A contest entry
- Talent and ANYTHING by silverscent.
510 points, ended January 27, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical Review Desired
Comments
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I so get it, but I would rather have the quiet most times. I like to think, and sometimes, force myself too. Great piece.
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Cooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooool
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BANDITS UNITED
Your work is very interestion, hope tp be reading much more on here...mac
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I love this so much.
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I loved reading this because it reminds me so much of my husband, he is the type who prefers, as you say, "the emptiness of noise." Where as I crave silence. Rushed, akward, or long and drawn out, any way it comes I love silence.
It also reminded me of a saying I once heard, "silence is golden but ducktape is silver." Haha... Congrats on the gold, it was well deserved.
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I can see why this won gold, nothing at all to critique here, thought provoking and well written poetry. Well done indeed.
Floorboards
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very nice write i love ti keep up the geat work
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My favorite line, " I prefer the emptiness of noise"
It fits perfectly in my life particularly. There are days I wish for this and you caught it all so wonderfully in this piece. Great job!
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This rings so true with me (pun not intended)
I love this, well deserving of gold.
Khia
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oooh I sure have missed your poetry!
This is beautiful and profoundly peaceful.
that closing to the peace is sensational!
Well deserved gold...
Delila
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A tour de force ...
I'd say. The rhyme is so unobtrusive that I didn't even notice it until the last word. Remarkable job.
(Sorry, I'm beginning to repeat myself again.)
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The contraditing phrases are just brilliant.
The final sentance is one you imagine to be an epitaph or something of the sort.
Thanks for entering. -
love this one
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See Chandni's comment to see how I feel. w00t
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wonderfully written as always hun
"i prefer the emptiness of noise"
well said, very well said, good luck.
Tasha
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You have left me speechless once again. The whole piece is just breathtaking. You should publish some of this honestly its amazing! I always find that in my school cafeteria I space out because of all the undefined voices talking, so I can relate to the poem. I'm so impressed as usual and you continue to be an inspiration to me.
Thanks for the great read
Good luck in the contest
♥Kat
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' your silence is too rushed'
i agree. that's brilliant.
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Great !
This is such a wonderful take on love its the truth within your words are beautiful and left me thinking and considering many things .well done. Excellent there were no errors. No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next one
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haha, yup, I scrolled too low and saw twice the line I was going to pick out too. "your silence is too rushed" is such a brilliant line. gah, I love love love this piece. amazing.
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I love that line too, "your silence is too rushed" excellent. This piece takes a couple of reads to truly absorb its strength. These are real emotions placed tightly to this page for pondering.
Excellent work. ~Pamela
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"your silence is too rushed"
fuck, I love that phrase. It's going on my page, darling.
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