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Paper Dolls

Paper thin images

dance upon dreamscapes
of weak-minded men.

Seductive spirits linger,
their fingers grip tightly
as they whisper,

"Take another look,

no one will ever know..."

As "take me" eyes taunt
from pixels to fantasy,
secretive glances
become your obsession.

No one will ever know ~

except you,

...and those
who try loving you.

 

 

Author notes

Theme: how seductive spirits can grip with a simple glance, effecting the one who looks and those in his life.


The vice can be something as "innocent" as the lingerie section of a store ad, or perhaps neighborhood friends sneak a Playboy over...Things could escalate from there.

The vice could also be a dream job that becomes an obsession to the point of a loved one's alientation.

Apart from God, nothing should ever be allowed to come between a person and their loved ones.  Risking their love is never an option.

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  • sensual
    January 30

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    Great work

    I really started to interpet this poem incorrectly until I reread it and then I was like oh ok now I understand it and I shouldn't have let my mind wander to begin with until after I read your author comments. So great work on giving me a bit of a challenge.


  • Draig aine gold member
    January 28
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    well done

    a gripping write and solid congrats om the bronze thingy

  • piccola silver member
    January 28
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    Thank you for the entry. I would say more but my keyboard is acting goofy. Thanks for the entry


  • ChelseySmile
    January 25

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    Love this poem so much. The word choice is perfect. I'd pick out a favorite part but I'd have to write the entire poem down, because I favor it all. Good luck in the contest.


  • csmmoms2
    January 16

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    Stunning

    I'm a weak minded man. And I dream of Ferries and soft things that twist about. And I dream about spirits that linger and I can't stop'em. -c


  • hypergrl
    January 16

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    Great job

    I love how simple the language is- no huge words or insane syntax, and yet it delivers the message with such strength and clarity. This poem is very clean- no loose words or phrases. Everything has a purpose. People thing that poetry has to be wordy or loose, but this is a great example of a concise yet emotionally stirring poem that has something to say.

  • midnightblue1272
    January 16

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    Amen!

    So very true, fellow poet. It seems like there's always some obsession that keeps us from our loved ones. Separating reality from fantasy & vice versa is always difficult. It takes a reality check to bring us back. Good one!

  • michaeline
    January 16

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    How very true the words you wrote here are.I loved what you had to say I feel the exact same way.You worded this perfectly.The title was a good choice and the flow went well.The first and last lines interplayed with the rest of the poem really good.Great job.

  • Eusebius
    January 16

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    A short but most potent piece of poetry here, and, unhappily, an entirely too common occurrance! fine write all around!


  • broken-colours
    January 16

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    Wow


    The title fit the subject perfectly and the poem was intense and full of force. Things like that do ruin relationships so many times. It's best to not even dabble in such.

    This was gorgeous and powerful.


    • Xianaria gold member
      January 16
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      Thank you ~
      I chose a particular obsession for this piece, but obsessions of any sort can ruin relationships. Much appreciated

  • it passionate

    i like how you worded your poem, and i love it.

  • Thor-201
    January 16
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    Good write about something you obviously feel strong about


  • maralisa silver member
    January 16
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    a wonderful poem good luck in the contestmaralisa


    • Xianaria gold member
      January 16
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      Thank you
      I didn't read the fineprint:
      POW 101 is for new PO' entrants only, so it was removed from the contest.
      My bad!

  • Great job on this one. I enjoyed it. I am also in complete agreement with your author's notes. It is well composed and well thought out.

    Mike


    • Xianaria gold member
      January 16
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      Thanks Mike,
      I appreciate the read & comments. Yeah, in all reality: any distraction that takes away from loved ones needs to be re-evaluated.


  • islekine gold member
    January 16

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    Aloha Tim!

    Read Bear's first line of this contest again....I do believe you have entered before! sorry...I'm removing!
    Take care and write on!


    • Xianaria gold member
      January 16
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      Then I guess Bear won't mind if it's featured

      No, I didn't read the first line, as I thought it was a copy & paste from previous contests!

      Thanks ~ contest or not, I felt I needed to write this.

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