Precious emotions speak silent desires
easily hiding behind ones heart.
Often afraid unexpected rejections
yet desperate to become enchantments
part...
Thoughts growing bloom in the soul
practicing to strike as Cupid's arrow.
Before love unfolds her silky petals
singing sweeter than God's tiny
sparrow...
I love you
Author notes
Oh God ! thank you so much for blessing me the Sweetheart...Unknown.
In a list
A contest entry
- the Sweetheart... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended January 27, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Is this angel watching YOU?
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Beautiful
This is a very nice piece. You expressed your emotions very well. You used a great choice of words and they really helped your piece. It just makes a reader happy. Very nice piece! -
This is just a beautiful write. Your choice of words really made this such an enjoyable read. It's one of those poems that when you feel down just reading the lovely descriptions in this will make you feel on top of the world again. Thanks for sharing.
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Gorgeous piece. Beautifully written. I really, really enjoyed this simple write. =)
<3 - Jess
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this is so beautifull and such a delicate read, so pretty too,
"before love unfolds her silky petals" i love them words.
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Ah..just a beautiful thought...beautiful images ..and beautiful impression of the poetry here..well done..thanks for sharing..
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lovely
the personification of the emotions in this piece work wonderfully. the title is really weak for such an emotional piece. it adds to the concept but doesn't catch much attention. i am not sure about the use of a semi colon in the third line of the first stanza. it feels like a pothole on a scenic drive. it halts the flow a little. The fourth line is the finest rose in this rose garden, fresh, simple, very catchy! the piece is memorable good luck with your romance. remember if one hesitates too long one may live to regret what was not done.
---will
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Ah, this is just darling. You must be such a priceless love to that certain person. How could anyone wish for more than this devoted sentiment to let them know how special they are.
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touching
and beautifully woven into a melodious song of love..great write my friend.
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Beautifully formed, enchanting rhyme on the fourth and fifth lines, I love it. I am reminded of the shy anticipation before love strikes in a more physical form.
Well done, Dove, good luck in the contest.
I love you,
Brazos
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