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Like a Tree

Transfixed beside you
In a thought that hung
I stopped at the crossroad
Beside you to belong

Seasons came and swept by
Fall turned me to gold
Cold winds bared my soul
I remained in stories yet untold

Loyal to the core
Under stars be-jeweled
Then young and vibrant
I stand now old, wrinkled

Un-swayed by the words
That tempted my faith to falter
I stood for the beloved
Who stood not beside me at the altar.

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Option 3 - http://tudorxrose.deviantart.com/art/Betrayal-104199754

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  • perfectsunset gold member
    March 24

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    Aww, this was deeply beautiful
    written with the grace of nature
    and love's heart break.

    Filled with emotion and
    lovely imagery.

    Thanks for entering & best of luck

  • poets whisper
    February 15
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    congratulations on the gold. Well written and enjoyed. Thanks for entering


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    February 6
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    Not bad, but I would suggest you change your background and text b/c it's hard to read

  • Rajaram
    January 20
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    The tone of melancholy does drown in the sensational structure of the poem. A wonderful poem that really moves the heart and tears it apart. Great write dear. Keep penning such wonders. I would appreciate your visit to my page to stamp your impressions there.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    January 18
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    A sadness and aching in the words that fit the picture very well. Nicely done. Good luck.


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    January 17

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    wow, this poem is incredibly sad. such intense emotions and pain that seeps from each word. the imagery that you've created with your words is not only vivid, but full of pain and incredibly sad.
    excellent take on the prompt..

    good luck
    kat

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