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We're like a scene at sunset

I found freedom in the curls of your hair
And adventure in your mouth,
We ebbed our craving, impulsive needs
Just enough to get by.
Your eyes tell an unspoken story of another life
Long before our time
But Rhythm and blues on the playlist helps me
Understand..A bit better.
The uncomfortable comfort we give and take
To and from each other, Its gorgeous, electric, natural
Like lightning Storms and besides
Your arms just feel too good to pass up.
You Are the Sunsetting Sky,
And I the silhouetted trees.
And Boy
Aren't we a beautiful sight

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  • sidewinder silver member
    November 4

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    thy words touch within those nights where one finds those need within those arms and moments in that syncopation where romance smiles ...one moment at a time.
    keep penning on one stroke at a time!
    Bill

  • msjuicytech
    September 1

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    I can't believe..

    the absolute beauty and passion of this piece... I loved each line..."I found freedom in the curls of your hair
    And adventure in your mouth" WOW. Your imagery is lightly provacative...I loved it.
    And the ending flows right in with perfection "You Are the Sunsetting Sky,
    And I the silhouetted trees."
    WONDERFUL.... I loved your name, but I adore your talent!!!
    WELLDONE.


  • YinYang Wolf
    May 12
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    this is a beautiful poem, keep up the good work, I like your style of writing.


    • Yummy Cinnamon Bun
      May 12
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      :]

      well thanks I'm going to go check out your poetry in a while. I have some things I have to get done first.

  • Eusebius
    May 12

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    this is actually a very fine piece of poetry, excellent with sharp and well controlled images and lines... just excellent!

  • N.E.Haymanali
    February 9

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    (I found freedom in the curls of your hair)
    An exciting verse that made me dream of beautiful feelings.


  • solarjinx
    January 23

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    i sorta hafta agree with summer love here, this was quite beautiful! no joke. and i typically shy away from this type of writing, you know that about me, but boy-oh-boy i really dug this! nicely done, ernie, im giving you the claps.


  • Sunkissed xo
    January 22

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    This is one of the most beautiful poems I've ever read. No joke. Not just because it is full of such breath-taking, gorgeous imagery & emotion, but because it feels so real and true. A truly amazing write. Well done!


  • Hateful Apathy
    January 20
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    The beginning sounds kind've... hawt.
    STEAMY SMEX SCENE!!!!!!!! *pulls out camera*

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