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Love Does Not Have Eyes (A Boring Fictional Romance)


 

At a café table, a man sat across from a woman and as he spoke, his right hand gestured toward her, while his left lay flat on the table, its index finger rubbing gently on the ornately brocaded linen.

"I want to prove to you that love does not have eyes -- that while on the surface society adores youth and beauty, beneath such superficiality, romance is blind."

She looked at him intently, silently, revealing no hint of emotion, except her hand, which hovered, unmoving,  above her coffee cup, clenching a spoon which she intended for the purpose of stirring her cream and sugar.

He did not smile when he continued, but looked at the woman, then down at her hand, trying to understand the thoughts hidden beneath her dour exterior,

"There was a man, not a young man, nor a distinguished elderly gentleman. He was just a man, with wrinkles, and gray hair, and a stoop when he walked. He was long past his prime, though if you looked steadily into his eyes, you could see the embers, of a once great fire, a glow that refused to completely die."

While the man spoke, his companion across the table began to quietly stir her coffee. He could tell by the way she held her head still, slightly turned downward, that she was listening to his tale.

"In another city far away there lived a woman, somewhat younger than the man, but not in her fullest bloom. Streaks of gray highlighted loose strands of hair that she would often push back into place behind her ears, in a self-conscious act to remain emotionally collected. "

Hearing this, the woman took her hand off her spoon and thought to move it to the side of her head, to check for loose strands, but resisted the temptation. She kept silent, but glanced up toward the man, their eyes meeting for a moment, giving her consent to continue,

"Though she too wore the marks of time, she was an attractive woman, though she had fallen into the habit of frowning too often. She was thin, maybe from too many years of watching her weight, her cheekbones sharply revealed her age in her face, and her lips, which she once considered her best feature, had grown thinner and pale, though not unappealing."

"Who knows how events happen, how fate plays a part in the meeting of a man and a woman. Lonely, she placed an ad in the personal section of the classifieds. She was both excited and repulsed at having done that -- there was always excitement in the notion of a new romance, but shame in having been reduced to such a desperate situation."

For the first time since the man began his story, the woman across from him spoke, "Was she desperate? lonely I can see, I don't think she was desperate."

The man looked kindly at her, a faint smile creasing the corners of his mouth, "No, she was not desperate." he amended.

"The man was reading his newspaper one day, and though it was not his typical routine, he scanned down the personal ads. He saw the one placed by the woman and was intrigued. Before he had a chance to think, and thus second guess his action, he dialed the number in the ad, and after a long conversation, the two decided to meet."

"They had much in common," he continued. "They both liked to dine out, to go to plays. They talked about their families, their jobs, but also about the future, what each wanted out of life. They became good friends, and naturally enough they then became intimate.

She smiled slightly at his last words, familiar with his story up to that point.

He returned her smile and then reached into his jacket pocket, taking out a small box, which he kept covered with his hand.

"There is more to the story," he said, revealing the box, which he then opened, in unison with his words. "Will you marry me?" His face bore no smile, giving emphasis to the seriousness of his question, but he could not hide the embers in his eyes which glowed brightly.

Taken by surprise, her tenuous lips formed an "O" and she looked up into his fire and did not attempt to put out the ardor she saw there. Though all she could manage to utter was a breathless, "Yes" it fanned the flames which grew stronger, extending to his entire face. He took the ring from the box and placed it in the palm of her slender, extended hand. After a brief pause, he gently took it from her palm and slipped it onto her shaking, left index finger.

"And they lived happily ever after." he said with a youthful laugh, bringing an end to his story and hopefully proving to the reader his opening proposition, that beneath superficiality, love is blind.

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  • waydownuponjoy
    October 29

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    Love is blind ...

    and your story surely gives merit to that cliche. It held my attention as I read it and it seems that it is only one chapter of what could be an on-going novel of romantic fiction. I leave you with this ... you do have a way of weaving interesting nuances into your stories that make them come alive with sense for something more ... beneath superficiality. I like that ...! jy


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    January 25

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    Breathlessly I read each line,
    the description so filled with detail
    that the scene was taking place
    directly in front of me.
    Breathless, for I so wanted
    a happy ending, wanted
    the premise to be true,
    that love can lie happily
    beneath the surface.

    (To do the piece true justice
    the writer could delete
    the word "boring" from
    the parentheses.)


  • Melodies
    January 23

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    A happy story! As the story ends, the lives of the two begin and who knows what happens next? Nothing that begins ever has an ending.


  • pixiestix gold member
    January 22
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    You have such a wonderful way of creating a scene. I like the happy ending.

    Love is blind. I agree with the speaker. It is a connection of souls. The outer package has not much to do with it aside from maybe an initial attraction maybe. The full scope lies within.

    Exceptional.

    I feel embarassed about the crazy comments below. lol


    • Yemassee gold member
      January 22
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      "I feel embarassed about the crazy comments below. lol"

      A priceless line!

      No you don't it's what we do...we sandwich normal talk with crazy talk.


      • pixiestix gold member
        January 22

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        I was talking about your comments, not mine

        Seriously, I really liked this one. You were talking about the importance of little details in stories yesterday. Things that stuck in my mind were how the man lightly rubbed his finger on the table, the woman with the spoon hovering over the coffee cup. I didn't even have to go back and look. Those details stood out a bunch and have so much to do with the conversation taking place. Very nice.


        • Yemassee gold member
          January 22

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          thank you. And you are right. And again, a smart cookie. Do something wrong so I can say something bad about you.


  • pixiestix gold member
    January 20
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    Don't mind me, I'm just saving this place. I think Number 2 is still available. Maybe you can find a seat there.


    • Yemassee gold member
      January 20
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      It's a nice quiet place isn't it. Make you wish you had a nice placeholder like this right?

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