Within the night unfurling, the moon rising high
there's a feeling inside of us, one we can't control.
Tonight we clasp our hands together, chanting a prayer
for all good intents will never be whole.
There are never bad magics nor any bad destinies
but instead we face an evil worse than life;
we face ourselves in this night and to the day.
Fighting for life and until death, we control not this strife
but instead the rising and setting of our stars.
Our paths are never ending, parallel and never crossing.
The tight blood dripping from our necks, the time ticks
And tonight it's our goodness we keep tossing.
Fly away, oh pure light, and escape to fairness.
Let the dark overwhelm and disorient our blind eyes
and show us the night will win the war, not we.
Take the sharp edge of pain and cut the ties
for no longer will I stare and wait for the blood.
Drip, drip; it falls down, soaks through; I lie
and expect never again for my heart.
Throughout the nights, it's washed away in my cries.
So, goodnight, my old friend; good night
End my line, cut it forever to never again connect
and let my distant, desperate shouts be heard
Good night, I repeat, and leave your life: Perfect.
Author notes
A rose of any color and bright blue daisies. 
A contest entry
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The poem is lost, yet hopeful. Did it make you question anything?
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amazing. good luck
hope all is well
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Very deep and dark
Could an evil worse than life be OURSELVES? Does Evil actually exist or is it just wrong thinking, - not appreciating the true situation - unskillfull action?
Lots of wonderful imagery in this poem, -the rising and setting of our stars, parallel paths, and much more that is very good.
However I am overwhelmed by the despair in this writing from one so young. I hope I am wrong and that the author is really upbeat and full of positivity,LOL. If we cannot find hope and meaning in this desparate world, (and it does look desparate from close up). Try imagining that you are looking at our world from the Moon. It is a beautiful place, You are a part of the universe, you have a right to be here, and whether or not it is clear to you, no doubt the universe is unfolding as it should, to paraphrase the poem, - Desiderata.
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Thanks! I actually am a VERY upbeat and positive person; I just don't usually write what I'm feeling. But thank you very, very much for your input. :]
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Hi there I am a bit new at this game, so have just found your reply. Pleased to hear you are up beat in this difficult world. we all have dark feelings and longings locked inside and it is very important that we release them, let them out in a safe environment, or they will destroy us. I am very good at repressing my true feelings myself so I can't talk about anyone else. fortunately for me, I am married to a woman who can read me like a book,LOL
Regards David
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Lots of wonderful imagery in this magic piece has a gr8 flow and relates well to the reader
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Wow, that poem was amazing. Really good job. I love the way you expressed how you feel. Your detail was really nice to. Really good job [:
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