You told me that you loved me
You acted like my friend
You said that you would never leave
that you would be with me till the end
But then you broke your promise
That dark and dreadful day
And let me tell you this,
My heart will never be the same
Every night I cry myself to sleep
Thinking about your face
It's hard to make it through the week
Thinking about you all the time
I know my heart will someday mend
And I will be okay
But my love for you will never end
For you were my first true love
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Thank you for your entry
Your words are sad, they show love and loss and not having what you wanted and what someone else had promised.. I think that the rhyme is a little simple and the words a little cliche' but overall your message is poignant and well done.
Thank you for entering my contest and good luck
Shari
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WOW!! I know exactly how this feels... Id hate to admit this, but you will never forget your first true love... It will always be within your heart... You did a great job expressing that... Im sorry this has happened but honestly, you will find someone so much better than that... I have and I know that you could too... Just keep your head high and believe that theres somone so much better out there waiting for you!!! keep up the great work and good luck in my contest!!
thanks for entering!
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this is really great. Very easy to read and flowed nicely. One of my favourites you have done..
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It's good...I like it.
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thank you.
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thank you for the comment
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I really liked this. A tale of a well and truely shattered soul. Very nicely written. Very nice flow and layout. It also has a kind of rythm and ryhme in some places. Thanks for the great entry. xo
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thank you. it is one of my favorite poems
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WOW!! This is a very good write and i totally agree wtih you... No matter how much you want to, you can never forget your first true love... its just impossible... Im really sorry for what you are going through.. i know how it feels cause i have been there many times over the last three years... I hope things work out for you.. keep up the amazing work!
Shannon*Leah
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thank you.....ive come to realise though that i am better off without him.
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wow
Love this feel the same way bout the one I love. Cept they didn't break the promise, I was the fool....... Loved this great job
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thanks for the comment.
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