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In Your Silence

Sometimes I wonder if you care for me at all.
You gave your answer when you chased me out the door.
Sitting here I stare into a mirror with no soul.
In your silence I realise it's only you.
You've got no one left to turn to, no one but your self.
I realise now your tears were fake.
The dreams we once shared sit upon a dusty shelf.

The way you hurt me cannot be erased.
Please don't expect me to forgive.
In your silence our fates no longer laced.
I never claimed to be a saint.
For you told lies that cannot be forgot.
And so I must say goodbye.
The love I once gave no longer saught.

It's been almost three weeks since we last spoke, forever in girl time.
The price it seems was only mine.
The damage you did, like an explosion in an old coal mine.
I watch you smile, watch you laugh.
And so we stay engulfed in your silence, engulfed in misery.
But the pain you caused me is nothing to you.
The reason why is not unclear, no longer a mystery.

For in your silence, it has become clear.
Set upon a course that cannot be undone.
That I was the one who held our friendship dear.
No longer friends are we considered.
It took a while but now I see.
You betrayed me long ago for nothing.
Nothing more than a man I could not be.

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LadyAdie

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  • UpInTheStars
    May 16
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    this is so vivid in detail. I love your metaphors. Its amazing. Wonderful, actually.:]


  • pd11
    February 24

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    Nicely written... i must say i love the flow of the poem.
    people come and go from life... friends stay, thats all we ever learned. hence when they move on and we dont we cant take it in our stride. guess we shudnt.. but at times i really wonder if it is a wasted effort, this hurt this pain...


  • xXmiserysecretXx
    February 14
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    Astonishing

    like i said before...Astonishing


  • HopelessPoet1087
    February 5

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    wow... i love this piece, very emotional. I can relate so well. I try holding my friendships up because I feel like they are all I have, and yet no matter how hard I try they always seem to crumble around me.

    Thank you for entering this poem and good luck :-)


  • starving4perfection
    February 3

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    yep i definately agree with everyone! a very emotional piece. but guys who make you upset and cry and not worth the tears EVER!
    "In your silence our fates no longer laced.
    I never claimed to be a saint.
    For you told lies that cannot be forgot.
    And so I must say goodbye.
    The love I once gave no longer saught."
    wow! loved it but that bit stood out for me! such honesty flows from your words. amazing piece
    thank you for the amazing entry and good luck in my contest


  • shardsofmemories
    January 31
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    this is marvelous. full of emotion like a poem should be in my bookgood job.


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    January 30

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    truly excellent u did a marvelous job with this piece!!!


  • loveangerbeauty
    January 28

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    amazing

    i really loved this poem! it's so true my first impression was that it was about a relationship, but then i got to the end and it seemed to be about a friendship that ended and either way i can relate and so i really like it!


  • LoveGoneMad
    January 28
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    Great write.


  • RebelAngel
    January 28

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    This is really insightful. My favorite stanza is "It's been almost three weeks since we last spoke, forever in girl time." Great write


  • there-goes-my-heart
    January 26

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    Good job

    YEAH! I love the title of your poem. Often, what isn't said is more important than what is.
    I wonder, was it a literal chasing out the door or not? You get me thinking in this poem, I like that.
    Did you have a specific outline or pattern to your rhyming? If you did, could you tell me it, because it seems pretty intriguing.
    Line 6 with the fake tears is excellent. I like your comparisons and your judging the past by the knowledge of the future.
    Overall, a good piece. I would continue to read over it periodically and change anything to whatever your mind spontaneously congers. Keep it real,
    there-goes-my-heart


    • Winged Unicorn
      January 28
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      Thanks

      Thanks for the review. The rhyming is meant to be every other line but at the beginning of one verse the first three lines rhyme. The three lines weren't intentional.


  • Nyphadora
    January 15

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    Angst

    The emotion in the poem can be read loud and clear I really like it. I am a big fan of poems with angst and problems. The only critique i make is that a word is misspelled. Realize other wise the poem was perfect

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