Heart of a lonely land, a frozen blue sky
frost hiding green,
Dark hiding dreams.
Author notes
Another one from the workshop with Robert Hass. he told us to write a haiku, but instead of focusing on the syllable count, he told us to focus on imagery and how almost every haiku has a seasonal reference.
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ah, yes, meant to mention that i love the pseudo-rhyme. that was the first thing i wrote it Comment Draft 1. Really powerful.
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im going to shoot something. i had a whole long comment written up, and i hit something on the keyboard, and the internet box went bye-bye. anyway...i really love this poem! im not going to tell you exactly what i love about each phrase like i had all typed up, because it ends up sounding like im just trying to pick it apart. no. its really great, and the whole thing works together with some really great imagery ('frozen blue sky','frost hiding green'), deeper meaning (last line) and the feeling that goes with it ('heart of a lonely land' as well as the last line, and pretty much the whole thing).
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PRETTY!!!!!!!!!! Much prettier than Joe singing falsetto. Though that's not hard.I love the way the "frost hiding green/ dark hiding dreams." sort of rhymes, only not really. It's beautiful.
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