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upon the rainbow of reality's reign

 

 

 

 

 

We sketch sweetness

into palms' promise,

as hands hold fast

to future's forming canvas

 

and adoration's ambience

sullies embers

of long-etched echoes.

 

You remove thorns

that adorn my essence

and utter a prayer

for fairer sands

 

as I become the moth

of your muse,

offering opiate kisses

for your amusement only 

 

and my inner-child

turns to wilder ways.

 

My yearning for you

no longer yawns,

as dawn dreams

of truth's togetherness

and we become guardians

of our shared gains--

 

You are an exhibition

of my existence,

the ultimate pathos

of peripheral perfection

 

and I...

 

am a thousand anagrams

arced

across your heart.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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I used ALL 15 words:

embers, exhibition, ambience, peripheral, child, thorn, sketch, hold fast, moth, guardian, canvas, yawn, prayer, sands, opiate.


For my man, with love

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  • Todays Poem Box
    February 1

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    Excellent job with the word bank!!
    15/15 words used.
    Great imagery. Excellent emotion.
    Thanks for entering and best of luck!
    Write on.
    ~*~


  • ScarletO gold member
    January 17

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    Truly Superb! Your way with metaphors fills the heart with wonderful passion. I always enjoy a well written love poem that dismisses the yawns. Excellent use of the word bank. You got it!!!

  • Oh my your metaphors in this are just brilliant! Love the whole piece and it's a wordbank Just amazing. Beautiful thoughts here and I am sure you are more of a butterfly than a moth, unless, of course, you are alluding to yourself as the moth moving into the light of your love!
    best wishes with this La.
    Gaylene

  • "offering opiate kisses
    for your amusement only

    and my inner-child
    turns to wilder ways"

    these lines really stuck with me.
    amazing work! thanks for writing


  • Hetha gold member
    January 16

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    a">www... This is so sweet. I hope your man loves it as much as we do.


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    January 15

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    You should use more word-banks and NOT tell us they're word-banks, La. This one took me on quite a trip.

    "You remove thorns
    that adorn my essence
    and utter a prayer
    for fairer sands"

    ... the very unconnectedness of the images, the very idea of thorns adorning something, made my jaw drop.

  • SoulWhispher
    January 15

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    Wow, great use of the word bank, you have created a poem that both flow beautifully, but has such emotion. great job, blessings with love John


  • vici377
    January 15

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    you are truly amazing my friend..and to use the whole word bank and turn it into something amazing..wow..I STAND IN AWE..hehe..best of luck in the contest..blessings..namaste..


  • Ryno
    January 15

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    This was beautifully penned Laura. I love your abstractish imagery and how it slowly molds into an emotion throughout the piece.

    "as dawn dreams
    of truth's togetherness"

    blahahshhbghallh. <--- no words. LOVED that.


  • etoile
    January 15

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    woah this is amazing.
    this actually blows me away.
    all the imagery is fantastic, and you're really good at using alliterations.
    i have nothing else to say about this aha.
    this is beautiful, best of luck in the contest.


  • Janice M Pickett
    January 15

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    What a wonderful poem. I love your style and your positive attitude, It is a pleasure reading your poems. Clappy*


  • Nom de Plume
    January 15

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    wow, now if only love existed, this would capture it wonderfully... very easy read, emotion is strong and liking the different poetic devices


  • Aurielle
    January 15
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    New words I see
    very nice
    and words comming out
    something beautiful of love again


  • poeticwaste
    January 15
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    Wow.

    The imagery. That is the definition of love.

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