Hello?
Is anybody out there,
Or am I truly alone in this crazy place.
I see you all around me staring,
But I cant hear, feel, or talk to anybody.
I feel so distant maybe I don’t belong here
Do you hear me?
HELLO!?
I scream and cry but you just carry on with your day
So I return to my gutter and try to survive.
I feel so useless, so deprived.
Am I really worth consuming a soul?
My life seems to have come to an end
Did it really even begin?
I’ve got nobody to turn to and nowhere to live.
Maybe I should just disappear with the help of my knife.
You wouldn’t miss me you don’t even care.
I’m nothing in your world
You can’t bother to say hello or simply wave.
I think finally I’m dropping one last scream.
Goodbye, goodbye for now, goodbye to all, goodbye for good.
GOODBYE!
A contest entry
- the biggest prewrite contest ever by serenity silvermoon.
900 points, ended January 18, 362 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your thoughts and feelings... by invisible2u.
600 points, ended February 6, 69 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
criticism is welcome plz
Comments
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Well Done.
I got the vibe from this poem, like the evanescence song hello. (That is a huge compliment by the way)
I love her, and i love your writing. Everyone can at some point relate to this and i think it was very well written and expressed. Given the subject of the poem awesome seems a little strange, but i really enjoyed this piece. Very good write...Looking foreword to reading more of your work!
Great job!
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thanks for entering my contest, i really like this poem, i can relate.
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