thoughts infest my mind
constantly streaming
like an infinite roll of ticker tape
never stopping
only slowing
just long enough for me to realize
the pain that I'm in
running so fast that it overloads
black out
reboot
memory lapses sanity
my emotions have no skin
exposed
raw
just sitting
staring at nothing
again
or at least that's how you see it
will I burn in fury
or drown in tears
spin the wheel
we all lose
Author notes
I had an argument not long ago where someone asked "what the hell is wrong with you?" I thought about it for a long time before I finally replied "I'm crazy, that's what the hell is wrong with me"
A contest entry
- infectious.insanity. by Loki.
850 points, ended January 17, 34 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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Boy have I been there. "What's wrong with you?" , "I think someone put something in that Drano I drank earlier!"
There was something simple and sociopathic about this. Like the writer has finally just given up. Reached their breaking point, you could say.
The only thing I have a question on (Raises hand and waves) is your use of drowned in the third to last line. The first line of the last stanza is in present tense while the second is in past. Just gave me a little hiccup reading. Would it work better "will I burn in fury or drown in tears"?
If you intended for it to be drowned, then disregard my suggestion.
All in all, I really liked this. Thanks for entering and best of luck.
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Thank you very much. I always jump at the chance to let my crazy out.
I was actually revisiting a breaking point that I have reached many times before, I keep trying to put it back together but it always breaks again.
And that was a typo error on my part thank you for pointing it out, I fixed it.
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