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Secrets

I will bury these bones
No one will know of my crimes
If i lie
The truth will never be found
My secrets will cry alone
As they disappear into earth
And when no one is looking
I will cry for what I have done
I will regret my actions
But no one will know

Author notes

This is NOT a poem about me murdering someone. It is actually about a normal secret that you don't want anyone to know about. Everything pertaining to bones in the earth, crying, and crimes is all figurative

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  • Harlequin Dance
    February 2

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    I feel it would be easier to read if you added in the necessary punctuation. Actually, the last part about crying and hiding it is pretty good.


  • Shyarn
    February 2

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    hmm

    its good, though at first read it seems very straight forward, out and out murder... you shouldn't have to write in the authors notes what the poem is about.. it should speak for itself. maybe revise it a little, add some lines that create mystery or intense unease and show that its NOT just about murder and the reader needs to think deeper.


  • Dark and Shallow
    January 15
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    it makes one wonder what this secret is, hehe. really good n its pro'lly gonna be itchin' at me for a while. lol.