Love is a funny thing.
Just when I felt my world crashing around me,
There you were, a steady hand, keeping me from drowning in the dark.
The sound of your voice pulls me back to reality.
Its my lullaby, a calm warmth that spreads over me,
A blanket, as warm as your arms, protecting me from the demons that plague my mind.
Sometimes I wonder if you know how much I love you.
Nothing else matters when I'm with you.
I know it soooo cliche but its true.
I find my self lost in those pools of deep brown, the way you look into my own eyes, like you've never seen anything more beautiful, that little smile you get, and your cheeks look so chubby =D, the smile spreads through your eyes, and then you kiss me....
Did I ever tell you how cute you are?
I get scared when I think about how much I love you.
And then you kiss me, biting on my lower lip, just the way I like it,
And then I forget everything.
I'm so lonely when I'm not with you, even if its just staying on the phone while you sleep.
You've become my beginning, my end...I just can't see myself without you.
I'm no longer scared that I've fallen for you,
Because you've always been right there, with arms wide open, ready to catch me.
You're the light to my darkness,
The hand that pulls me to safety
Baby, I'm so proud to be your girl, I wouldn't want anyone else.
And even though you get me so mad sometimes, I cant help but love you...
Either way I just can't seem to stay mad at you =)
I never intended to love you this hard, this much.
Its taken me so long to get here.
But somehow you've broken down all these walls
I'm vunerable and open and all I can do is keep loving you
It hurts sometimes, I get worried I'm in too deep and that maybe I'll scare you away with my crazy feelings.
Silly, yes I know.
But after calling you mine, after so long...I just don't know what I'd do if you'd leave
I wish I had something more suave or debonair to say
Besides a simple overused I love you
But I've come to realized that even the simplest words can mean the world
Besides, you have my heart either way
>>for my baby<<
Author notes
Lord, this is a long one, and one of the few (n I mean few like a hand full, no I mean 3 =D) love poems I've ever wrote, its about my current bf, whom I love to death. I hope this wasn't a bore. I was really just rambling lolz.
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true love truly felt
such an obsessive love poem with perfect imagery, new love / tru love is like that. enjoyed the read, especially the lines:
"The sound of your voice pulls me back to reality.
Its my lullaby, a calm warmth that spreads over me,
A blanket, as warm as your arms, protecting me from the demons that plague my mind."
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well your rambling makes a very sweet heartfelt poem that i hope a lot of people can relate to this in well written peace your boyfriend is a very lucky guy to have someone love him that much wonderful
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<3 Abi -
I thought this was beautiful! So sweet, your emotions shine through so clearly, it's so obvious the way you feel. Wonderful and from the heart.
Blessings,
~Michaela~
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NO,,,it DIDN'T suck!!!
It was heartfelt and a GREAT tribute/dedication to an obviously very luck man,,,,I loved it,,, it brought tears to my eyes,, as i'm sure it did for him,,, it shows your true emotions and heart felt feelings,,, what more should there be to a LOVE poem,,,ummmm,,,, NOTHING!!! very nicely done,,,thanks for sharing
MICHAEL
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Hmmm what an interesting piece... and don't worry I mean interesting in a good way not a 'how do I be polite way.' The lines are very long for my taste, but they use the appropriate punctuation so they don't seem too long when they are read, it just seems a little awkward aesthetically. I have slight problems with the use of emoticons in the middle of a poem, but once again personal preference.
I'm no longer scared that I've fallen for you,
Because you've always been right there, with arms wide open, ready to catch me.
My favourite lines... They are so wonderful and obviously heartfelt they make the poem for me. And kudos for writing a poem about being in love I know its not as easy as it sounds, and besides it's depressing only reading ones about lost love.
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