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Gasp

Gasp,
sudden
breath intake
burning coldness,
from chilled fingertips.
Exhale,   enraptured   thirst,
rapid steam clouds breathing out
briefest    frozen   touches   torment,
conflicting thoughts meet warming desire,
brushing   caress   contorting   to  frost's   ice.

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  • The Poetic Angel
    January 15
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    Oooh Jems ...do i feel ice play comming on? ...

    Great Etheree

    xxx Your angel xxx


  • Stormy Days
    January 14
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    its and interesting peace i like the way it is set up


  • Swangrnv gold member
    January 14

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    well now..

    this piece is very interesting..it's got me a bit antsy because the potential for 'fire' is there..but those daggone references to cold makes me think.."THIS CHICK IS ACTING LIKE THE ICE PRINCESS!" l.o.l. but it's still an extremely well written piece!!

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