Stealing nothing
but her pure innocence,
put proudly on display
for them to look,
no touching;
[except for five pounds more]
-- She's ended up
no more than
a Russian doll.
Author notes
http://dianar87.deviantart.com/art/Please-Stop-55041132
Option One
30 words
It helps more if you've seen the show "Russian Dolls", dealing with the sex trade where girls were taken as sensual dancers then imprisoned as dancers + prostitutes.
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- 10/30/30 Quickie #2 by Sweet Impatience.
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Honorable mention
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Comments
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Hoodwinked!
Holy shit. This piece rocks with imagery and effective language that is enough to make you sick to the stomach.
Five pounds more, she sees fifty cents and does all the hard work. It's so so wrong.
I'm sorry I am late with the hoodwink, but hope you are glad for more comments!
Shari
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very very good.
You did a good job! I havent put up any new ones but i will soon, hopefully.
A.
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This is so well written, it is hard to believe that in this day and age this kind of treatment still exists. Best to you
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w-wow....
A million clappies for you!
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Powerful
your words speak in so many languages on this one, and its incredibly powerful with a strong message. I read it only once and I knew right away. it's sad and it's a horrible thing for these girls to go through. the imagery that you've painted with your words is vivid.
Fantastic take on the prompt
good luck
kat
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You mean pounds like money right??? just checking. Beautiful and tragic. I wish I could write short poems but no I always end up with a novel.. or else it seems incomplete. Excellent write. -jealous-
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Yes, as in the money situation
I was going to write dollars but didn't flow >.<
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The words speak for themselves... it's a beautiful write about an ugly subject. Well done.
Ken
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