when i have fallen and am layed to rest
lay my rifle apon my chest
with lever docked and bolt at rest
over my heart place my rank and crest
let my company know i did my best
when i have fallen and am layed to rest
Author notes
just something that came to me as i sat and thoght abut how i would like to be layed to rest.
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very nice, it flows nicely, rymes nicely, and makes great sense
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Well, I should have commented on this before, when I first read it. ^_^
Great warrior-esque poem here. I definitely approve with the honorable ties that are plainly visible here. I especially like the ending rhyme of each line, though I think this could be a little longer.
Great job.
You should write more often. ^_^
Your cousin,
--Flare the Arcphoenix
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Wow, baby, I love it
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I agree with Danzy, it holds an honorable essance. I really like this...keep up the great work.
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this sounds like someone from the army would be this is a well written peace really good keep up the good work
~GOOD LUCK~
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this is dark but moving and hold an honerable (i cant spell) essence, its short and too the point but almost gived the feel that you need to go back and re-read it because of the depth of each line, the meaning behind the words. well done
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