Waiting for life witout sadness
Where nobody ever cries.
Waiting for life without pain
Where nobody wishes theyd die.
Waiting for life without terror
Where people fear for their lives.
Waiting for life that is truthfull
Where nobody ever tells lies.
Waiting for life that is happy
Where children can laugh everyday.
Waiting for life that has friendship
Where children together can play.
Waiting for life that is perfect
That probally will never happen.
Waiting for life that’s forever
A life that will never end.
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Well written but the message just seemed kind of pointless. You have to come to a realization and not just leave us with waiting. Because in the end you have to do something, you can't wait. Thank you for entry and good luck.
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this is a very well written peace the flow is wonderful well written poem and it almost reads as if it rhymes but it doesn't rhyme you did well keep up the good work this is an amazing peace i like the whole thing my favorite is the last to line "Waiting for life that's forever a life that will never end."
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thank you....it is quite an old poem but im glad you like it.
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Waiting for life without terror
Where people fear for their lives.
-sorry, but this seems a little out of context.
it was a hopeful poem but then there's a line about people 'fearing their lives'.
it seems out of place.
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