Haunted

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• SweetWondersGirl
  January 14
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  Found it a little to repetitive, but over all it was very well done!

  
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  Samm.
  January 14
  
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  i think this is very nice but it uses to much repitition and i think you could take out some of the "yeahs" lol.
  but over all this is very nice

  
• Out Out
  January 14
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  Brings back images of high school.

  
• michaeline
  January 14
  
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  The flow to this is great.It will make a great song.You have alot of talant flowing in those veins,never give it up.

  
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  HorrorFiend
  January 14
  
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  Could defininetly be a really good song with some work.
  
  The "Haunted how long must I be taunted" works really well however,
  
  The "haunted...quietly I'm haunted am I'm dreaming"
  
  doesn't come off right. should it be I'm haunted am I dreaming?
  or I'm haunted and I'm dreaming. The am I'm makes no sense. Overall it has promise, some small adjustments will make it more clear.
• JuiceofOhio
  January 14
  
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  wow a bit spooky, i can see how this could be sung really effectively. nice work, good luck if you plan on singing it with a band or something, id like to hear how it turns out

  

by Timespell

On Jan 14 6:08 PM
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