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Condemned

They hold my arms,
They hold my hands.
Taking me back to their funny farms,
The jacket they have on me feels like one large rubber band.

The children taken,
No family left to stop them.
The stress makes the body feel shaken.
One lasp in judgement and I'm condemned.

The blast of the gun still rings in my ears.
The only option left.
He would yell and hit if he didn't get his beers.
They are taking my life away it's just theft.

They hold my arms,
They hold my hands.
Taking me back to their funny farms,
The jacket they have on me feels like one large rubber band.

The feeling of freedom is lost.
They won't listen or understand why.
They are putting me away at any cost.
Won't they let me say at least good-bye.

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  • Heroesrox
    September 6

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    I adore these parts.

    "The children taken,
    No family left to stop them.
    The stress makes the body feel shaken.
    One lasp in judgement and I'm condemned.

    The blast of the gun still rings in my ears.
    The only option left.
    He would yell and hit if he didn't get his beers.
    They are taking my life away it's just theft."

    Nifty write. Best wishes and thank you for the share!!!


  • Walls-within
    April 29

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    This is not bad at all. I like the way you wrote this. The voice was fantastic, and I love the way you were able to convey your emotions. Great job.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    February 6

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    Ah..perhaps you are narrating the rules of the destiny because destiney behave like this and you are away ..and even does not want to be away..well done..


  • AutumnsFlame
    January 20

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    hmmm... I liked this. I really did. Good tone, good images. I don't know what the word "funy" is, maybe you mean "funny"? Let me know if I'm mistaken, I kind of feel stupid... Anyways, good poem. Thank you for entering my contest.

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