If I were a rose
I would want to be red,
the one color that
most symbolizes death.
Thorns I would have
to protect me and then,
so dwelling upon a stem
others recommend.
I would bloom in mid june
hopefully near a tomb,
That way when I wither away
I will be in a place I could stay.
Author notes
it kinda makes sence i guess...Raeven Rocks!!
A contest entry
- If I were a rose by Patched Up Ragdoll.
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pretty bad huh?
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Different, I would not associate red to symbolize death normally.
I see how it fits though.
Shelly
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Interestingly, convincingly strange...
Thank you for sharing your muse's V-Day poem with us. I'd say it's slightly on the dark side, but I'm wishing you all the best in the contest! Take care. 
Peace, xx Cyn xx 
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This is very good
It has a sad side but it also tells of one who feels change can never be .Never thing this way for it is in the brilliance of the color and the protection of the thorns that keeps the rose true and protected . Pick not the rose let it be all it can be for a longer life for to pick it means instant death .
We are all a rose and if we stay within a protected family we will grow and show the brilliance so given and the family though they may seem to have thorns at times it is for your protection they feel like they cause pain yet in the learning of life we find as we become adults that that protection was given from the heart .Its a harsh world out here and there are far more pain that could come your way if you leave the family behind .
I know I commented on this to help with it earlier but didnt comment on what it made me feel so here goes
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No not bad let me help
If I were a rose
I would want to be red,
the one color that
most symbolizes death.
Thorns I would have
to protect me and then,
so dwelling upon a stem
others recommend.
I would bloom in mid june
hopefully near a tomb,
That way when I wither away
I will be in a place I could stay.
You had a very good write here I spaced it for you and there are a couple words different but its a good write indeed
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Clever thought to be in the same place. Blessings.
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Shouldn't recremend be spelled recommend? Other than that you forgot to put the thing in your author notes
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Thank you i fixed both
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