There once was a King, very proper and proud,
who lived in a castle overlooking the crowd.
He made up commandments for all to obey.
He posted his picture on public display.
He lead his great army with a firey sword.
"His people," he called them, addressed him as Lord.
He taxed all the money they worked so hard for,
then basked in the glory of "helping the poor."
Convinced people loved him, but he did not know,
the respect that they gave him was only for show.
There once was a King, unlike all the rest,
who wasn't concerned about who was "the best."
He taught how to serve, buy putting others first.
He spoke about "water" that quenches one's thirst.
He carried their burdens, He lightened their loads,
He stayed by their side down treacherous roads.
He loved them so much, He was willing to be,
crucified on a cross, so they could be free.
Forgiveness of sin, despite what they'd done,
there once was a King, who was God's precious Son.
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The is power in the name of Jesus - Option4 - Kevin Pace WordsDoMatter
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great write! a few spelling errors, but that's okay. It didn't take away from the piece or anything, so it's all good.
Thank you for sharing this in my contest and on AP. Definitely shows the contrast between God and Man.
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If I had any bones to throw i would throw them your way. This is an excellent story set up with the contrast portrayed perfectly. One character set against the skyline of another. Jesus will always win not just in writing, but in reality. Thank you for sharing your heart and where it leads with all of us. We need you and we need your ideas to stage against all the other minds that are at work at AP. There are atheists, witches, gays, cutters, suicidals, etc here. All are people and souls. It is obvious that you care about all of them and they are entwined within your soul. As you share your beliefs it seems that you carry no prejudice and have no hateful pride. You are a man like the rest of us just trying to share your side of the story. Share on my friend. I have no applause men left so you'll have to take me at my word, this is an excellent piece. RC
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thanks RC
I like your style... Jesus went to the sinners, the tax-collectors, the vagrants... they are the ones that need to hear. I think you've pegged me pretty well, though I can be stubborn and opinionated, I am very forgiving. thanks for sharing your insights, it's always interesting to see what people draw from what you write. - Kevin
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That is a really good poem on Jesus my friend. I agree with the depiction and very deep. As it must be when talking about Jesus. Just a few helps - on line five it should be 'fiery' and line 13 'by' other than that, brilliant.
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excellent catch
thanks for the corrections, that is whaat I'm looking for - well done - Kevin
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