In a blink of an eye, life passed me by.
Or was it in that moment of pain.
That night and those days
All the bright colors and grey.
The laughter and the sorrows
All the talks of the bonny days.
Miles apart from you my darling,
Can feel your fears and your rage.
Your restrains in this worldly maze,
Your tears in dark and your fits in this chase.
A silent prayer every moment for you,
A reluctant question in every pray.
This desire to absorb your anguish,
A tear for you under the pillow every day.
This is a actual life's play my dear one.
And we are all on a stage.
Come on ' and take the first short at it,
Don’t sit in that corner,still dazed.
Get up and kick around ,
Don’t let angry block you out.
If our saviour was crucified in this play .
What more can we utter of this life's dismay???
Can u relate to the feelings here?
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The trauma of seperation from the beloved is very painful as I know from experience.In this age of mobiles, internet and chatting life has become easier yet the heart pines for a caress, a kiss, a touch. Very beautiful and matter of fact write.The words have meaning and depth if no frills or bombastic presence.Thanks glad I clicked on this one.Conitinue to share and take care...
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Excellent
It is difficult to be separated from the one you share the most love with. This is my favorite line:
"A tear for you under the pillow every day."
Great ending of this poem.
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very nice piece keep the coming. it is nice to read you.
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"Come on ' and take the first short at it,"
do you mean 'shot' at it?
"Don’t let angry block you out."
Don't let anger get in your way.
I'm wondering if English is your first language. -
This is an inspirational poem for someone you obviously love very much.
Excellent!
Thank you for sharing\
Gaylene
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deserves more..
poor boy...
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Much of a positive upward mobile feel to this piece...
with it starting in a quite reflection....
it ebbs into great longing articulated in such a heart felt manner...
the sweet nuances of the every day rituals of missing and loving someone.
The charm of the whimsical ending shows the poets spirit.
You should be proud of this one....
Bless you lass,
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"This desire to absorb your anguish,
A tear for you under the pillow every day."
Superb!
Your feelings of attachment are commendable. The poem is highly inspirational.
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Outstanding
I liked the way you offer support and comfort to your loved one who seems to be depressed and out of sorts. You speak with great optimism and banish sadness. A strong and meaningful poem.
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alot..
is going on in this piece..i see love, hope, sadness
and some veiled anger..I hope whatever your journey is that it leads to where you hope my friend..
very thought provoking piece..
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I can relate to the feelings expressed here.[ I have a feeling that English is your second language.] Do you live in a part of the world where there is a lot of anguish and fear with violence a part of everyday living? Your writing says that you do. We who live in peace and quiet all the time salute you and pray for peace to come to you.
It's a good write expressing your feelings well.
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