::MALE SERIAL KILLER/FEMALE VICTIM::
::i see myself as the victim when i write::
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"I want to hear you scream....
wow you are beautiful....
soo beautiful, i love the smell of urine"
i hisssss as she whimpers,
my words instilling fear,
barbed wire securing her to the bed.
I had stripped her naked,
body begging to take me in as
my smile crawled sadisticly over
her severed skin.
I broke in while she was gone,
stowed away in her closet waiting for
the perfect moment....her flesh so soft.
I stroke her throat with my scalpel,
her arteries pounding.
Shredded muscle adorns my psyche,
swimming in blood as i run my blade
down her belly, slicing through a layer.
My knife cut through fatty butter,
breaking the seal that held her innards.
She split open so easily, so FUCKIN easily,
flaps of skin pinned back by my surgical
touch.
I lowered my face to her wound as
she sobbed uncontrollably,
feeling her muslces pulse beneath my tongue.
The metallic taste of blood got me off
as i worked my way down,
running my soaked tongue over her clit.
Again and again i sliced her stomach
as she began to orgasm.....
fighting the wire that bound her in place.
I sunk my hands deep inside,
her wounds making a suckins noise as my hands
dissappeared in a mass of flesh and gore.
The barbs dug in deep, slicing the tendons
in her wrists with a snap, blood arching across
a snowy, barren land; such an empty soul.
Pleasure swept through my body as i
began to rape her, the putrid smell of decaying flesh
invading my senses.
I felt she had become a part of me......
"i can't wait for you to fuckin die...."
i whispered in her ear as she moaned,
half conscious.
"I can't wait to feel you bleed to death,
go limp in my grasp as i violate you.
You don't understand,"
i growl as i pull out.
I grab her hair and rip her head back,
her throat arched in sacrifice.
I place the scalpel against her neck,
my body excited at this moment.
"You don't understand what it's like to be me,
to have these images i can't escape.
Every FUCKIN TIME i close my eye's,
i have to rape and kill, you fuckin
dirty little whores...."
Without warning, i flick my wrist and
am coated in a spray of red.
I hack through her throat again and again,
unable to control myself, unable to stop.
Her windpipe severed, she begins to wheeze and gasp,
the walls slashed by my self-hatred.
I can feel her beneath me,
gagging, shaking, her body fighting death,
fighting to LIVE!!!
IT'S SO EXCITING, REALLY!
watching someone die beneath you,
feeling like a FUCKIN GOD!
As the death throes took over,
i entered her for one last time,
enjoying every moment of her life.....
and her death.
"Save me. Please, save me...."
i whisper in her ear,
shaking her, trying to wake her up, revive her.
But she lays still, her last breath taken
and with that
i dissappear into the night.
Author notes
This is for a contest, sorry if it is to long.....i tried not to get as carried away with this one and tried to keep the details down.
A contest entry
- GORE ME[[#2]] by Super-GOREgous.
650 points, ended January 21, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow you are defenetly one of the best writers I bbe ever read the only other people thatbi can think of that are better than you are e.a Poe and stephenbking well that's my ppinion anyway
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This may sound sick, but this made me horny... really, great, yet disgusting write...
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if you want to know more ask xxheartbroken3xx.
Shes my bestfriend here at school. She left a comment on this poem as well so yeah. -
I'm not just basing this all on rumors. Me and him used to be close and he was the reason I started cutting. I don't anymore though. It was just a hell that I'm so happy I got out of. Hes at the top of my Death list.. sorry if I sound like i'm preeching. LoL. but yeah..you asked.
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Oh yeah.on this one. Well I know this dude at school and he just..has this dark side that just comes over him whenever he..yeah. coz lately hes been raping people.. and the part about feeling like a god. He kinda discribed something like that. But theres this whole other side of him thats soft. It's like he has a split personality or aomething. He doesn't, but still. I'v come close enough to being a victim. I don't know if the soft part is just a game that he plays..but some of the sick things he does. For example I think it was last week, or the week before he got soft with this girl then told her face to face one day that he liked her then she confessed she liked him back then he says..well, I don't like you anymore. And she gets waayyy confused so he says I'll prove it to you. when they reach the top of the cemetry he asks her to go back to school and get him some water and when she comes backs he's not there. A friend passes on the message that she needs to go into the bushes so she goes and there he is fucking one of her friends who is now clutching onto her clothes to cover her nakedness and then the turns around to face the other girl and says "See, I told you I could prove it"
and this was like up in the cemetry. Like everyone walks home through the cemetry after school so yeah. he just freaks me out these days. The drugs only make it worse. And I've gotten to the point where I don't care what happened to him in the past to make him so sick and twisted - hes just fucked too many people up. I thinks hes made up for what happened to him and anything else is just because hes so fucking evil.
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This poem was an excellent write, such darkness and gore, it was great. I look foward to reading more of your work.
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Sounds like someone I know...minus the killing part.. although...he may be getting to that stage...hmm...dunno. Anyway gruesome write, so imaginative...scary.
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I really loved this opening bit...
"I want to hear you scream....
wow you are beautiful....
soo beautiful, i love the smell of urine"
Honestly, I couldn't stop laughing at that. Priceless. You go on my favourites to cheer me up when I have had a bad night out hunting for victims.
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Amazing! sick twisted and amazing
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lol
thanks much. It's not all that great but......i did it mainly for a contest. It would have been longer but trying to follow the rules, haha
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AMAZING
Ah my dear cousin, once again you have surprised me. This is absolutely incredible. I applaud you greatly. So graphic, so entertaining. As both a sadist and a masochist this is beautiful -
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DOOD!!!
Eesha, i didn't even realize you went on this site anymore. Haha, are you accessing it through the school or at home?? I thoughtthis site was blocked at the high school :S
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dude this is the absolute shitt!
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holyyy shit. that's sadistically amazing. this sent chills down my spine. being a masochist, i find interest in these sorts of poems, and writings. i probably wouldn't screw them and kill them, but damn, making it hurt.. is the best way to do it. lmfao.
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LOL!
Thanks for the comment.....i chose to speak from the killers point of view yet when i wrote this, I'M the victim. lol. If i were to die and could choose how i was going to, i would do this in a heart beat ^_^
Thanks much for your comment
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Fuckin wild
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lol
hope it doesn't change your opinion of me? haha, i told you over the phone when we talked last night that my writing was pretty fucked up and disturbing, haha....
*shrugs*
i accept my mind now....i guess. lol
exactly WHY i need therapy, haha
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You know I always love your poems, I read that you were flagged for your writing, I am glad that you refuse to stop though.
You are so good at what you do.
I love it!
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Was entertaining.
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LOL
glad to see you're still out there ^_^
i refuse to give up this style of writing. I know that you and i were flagged for our violent content forever ago.....but guess what the name of this site is????
ALL....poetry.
they should change the site's name if they are going to delete people's writing -
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I've found content with artwork with people who share the same interest, but I come here time to time.
If you didn't know yet I just put up one that has been in my head for a while, it's the censured version though.
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SUPREMELY TWISTED
I love the hate, and crave the excitement. Bravo.
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THANKS!
Pretty disturbing, eh? Normally, my murder writes are a lot more graphic and disturbing, but she didn't want a long write for the contest....so i had to cut this short (otherwise, i would have added more detail, more violence and more to the actual rape scene....)
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that was like the best poems eva it maybe me feel sick but it was still great
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lol
i felt sick writing it yet enjoyed it very much
((i'm the victim....the one dying whenever i write these....so i feel less disturbed since i don't have violence in me to take a life. I don't really know how killers think, so i had done a lot of research on the psychology of murder and serial killers.....))
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I really love this poem i absoulty love it.it is really good.
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holy fuck amazin
im a masochist. I never looked at it from the sadist point of view. will have to switch the role sometime
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haha.....
it's pretty easy. I'm a masochist too....
I wrote this on my page, but in all of my serial killer writes, i'm the one being butchered.
So....
just in case Karma decides to be a bitch, i choose a method i want to die in in real life.
I just take things that would scare the fuck out of me and create a sadistic killer. Since i really don't know how they think and operate, i write as if i'm actually experiencing it.....like, soemthing as terrifying and sick as i can come up with.
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