Photo taken on January 11
Antwerp
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Very nice
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i liked it though you used a picture i felt that your words needed no image to support it..
very simple and beautiful
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your image
I do like your work lady, but you know me, I surely have something to say that might make you think.
Think on this little sister.
What if you used more descriptive words, ones that have greater value, instead of (by, and, the), just a thought?
Still your image came through to shine in ones mind.
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Thanks Sir Ronald
I don't know, it seems that moon, clouds and sunlight are enough imageries there, at least I can't think of anything else I could add there. Any suggestions?
Glad to have a comment from you again, made me smile
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Mari your photos of the moon are exhibit worthy
Anna Lee
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lovely picture and poem, Mari!
~ Nicolette
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Mi querida hija,
Yem has said exactly what I was going to say (Why does he ALWAYS do that?) and to save time and space I won't type it all again but will just say:
Beautifully succinct haiku and absolootly stunning photo.
(Now I'm gonna finish my brekkiy and dash off to hospital.)
Mucho amor, abrazos y besos XOXOXO el padre.
BTW: My ducks have ALL flown away!! I am SOOOO lonely!!
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Thanks dad!!! Did you get the ducks I sent to you (birthday picture card)? They are Belgian ducks, live in the zoo where I work, hope they didn't fly away before getting at you
Please send my love to Edna
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This is lovely. What really struck me about it is how you saved "the moon" til the last line. After reading the word "haloed" and the magnificent emblems of sunlight and clouds, its seems like that final line becomes a sort of revelation of an ethereal entity. Something about the break of flow at the end of the second line helps with that incredible effect. I read the first two lines succinctly, but the grammar (omission of the understood "is"), even without the usual comma, makes me take slight pause before reading the new noun phrase "the moon." It really has a great effect. Amazing what can happen in so few words. (And ridiculous how many words it took me to tell you how much I liked it!)
Nice work!
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For anyone who thinks the word sun light[sic] is a contradiction: The moon as it rotates around the earth shines when the sun's light beams into its surface and is reflected back to earth, that is why we see the moon shine. You knew that, but I figured someone out there might have something to say...
Oh great burnished moon,
goddess of the winter chill...
Oh sorry, I forgot for a second that I wasn't a poet...ever see cartoons where the character walks off a cliff and does not fall until (s)he realizes there is no ground under him/her?...maybe that is me and poetry. Little did I know as a kid that The Roadrunner and Wylie Coyote were covert symbols of the battle between, Rationalism and Empiricism.
With the premise of the moon's halo, I think of religious artwork that depicted sacred figures with that halo or nimbus above or behind their head, And of course for you the moon is indeed sacred. It has probably been the subject of more of your poetry than anything else, except maybe anti-Mayne poems...The moon of course was worshiped as a goddess of the evening in ancient times (hence my silly lines above) ...I remember a fertility poem you wrote once, its subject was the sun but this haiku made me think of that. Is it still in your archive, and if no, why not? That is of course a Rhetorical prompt for you to put it back if you deleted it.
So I see it as more than just a typical moon haiku, by adding a spiritual element.
I've been told by many people that they see a halo above my head...
"haloed
by God and the Heavens
Yemassee"
no wait, that is a senryu...since it would be meant as irony...
I know what the haiku form and the moon mean to you, both are lovely. I like the muted branches in the photo. It gives it a dreamy, quiet effect.
I never did master that brevity thing...as you can see. Exactly where in this comment did you start skimming? No answer means, "before this part."
The haiku and the photo are both Mariesque, I wouldn't need the name to know that.
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lovely, i love moon halos
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Halo is the idea that i get here, very much so...the moon and clouds capturing in almost sepia color. The photo has a sense of the moon in a foggy night, when everything looks still, and mounting the poem on the photo another wonderful effect... PK
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Mariza+camera+moon+words=mesmerizing force.
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