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I loved him.
Yet, I couldn't let him in,
I couldn't let him close enough
To break what beat right under my skin.
I never let my eyes close, when we kissed,
Every tear I shed, I made sure he missed.
Looking back now, I wish I had given myself to him
Too late now,
He's married, with a beautiful set of twins...

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Option chosen: 4. "She had something breakable just under her skin"
American Girls - Counting Crows

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  • xDemonicxAngelx
    February 26, 2009

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    Oh no this was really sad But I thought it was really good Thank you for entering and good luck!

    Take care


  • PureRomance
    February 22, 2009

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    This poem was very preciousely sweet & sad. I loved reading it. You did a fantastic job on this poem and best of luck to you and your poem in the contest. God bless you always in everything you do and write.


  • Pheo
    February 18, 2009
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    How sad yet lovely. I love line 5!


  • michichoeret
    January 14, 2009
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    like inmensely

    very well written
    great lay out as well


  • Swangrnv gold member
    January 14, 2009

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    oh..

    this is so sad..missed opportunities..i know them way more than i'd like to..great write my talented friend..


  • jayyniecakes.
    January 14, 2009

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    fabulastical

    I like this! its so sad, and the rhyme skeme relle flows.

    I loved him.
    Yet, I couldn't let him in,
    I couldn't let him close enough
    To break what beat right under my skin.

    my favorite part ^^^^

    Good luck in the contest! :]]

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