As a young, tender, inexperienced
people think so wildly, may be naturally
about all of us, the mankind, its journey.
In childhood we get pleasure in a toy,
while student may be in a book,
during adolescence in sensual feeling, so called love.
Man grows, all these see their phases
and with time they even disappear.
The kind of attraction one feels to love as young
becomes laughing stock among elderly folks.
Everybody is correct in his or her own place.
But why the abuses, murder, terror, painkillers,suicide?
Because we cannot keep the individual limit,
once started, an addiction tries to set in
and like stupid fools we make ourselves victims.
So the point is self-control.
The worthless education today makes us
money making machine and we learn to grab
whatever comes to our greedy sight
even if it causes more harm than good.
So we get tension, diseases and what not?
Now what is the remedy?
First of all we should set our goal of life.
It is definitely not eating and getting fat.
All we do is for our happiness.
It will come only if we have self-control
over everything in life and get peace.
When we will see ourselves not as mere bodies
since all bodies are bound to die,
but as an entity which is ever alive,
all little pleasures will become futile
and true and permanent happiness will prevail.
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Author notes
Prompt: 21. My life
F r e e l a n c e w r i t e r
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wow i agree it defo made me think i like the words you used theyr very effective!
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this is a very strong poem, and it made me think. good job
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thanksf or the entry
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I found this a very uplifting poem with alot of moral messages, you see the world very clearly and express it well in poetic form, it was a very good write and i wish you good luck in my contest.
~Menna
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Wonderful write for the contest at hand! I hope you place; I wanted to do a contest of a similar nature - I think you did well!
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Very insightful.
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i like the last line. "and true and permanent happiness will prevail". that is my out look on life that one day my true happiness will show. thanks for entering my contest
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wow this is just amazing.... thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck
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Beautiful. Good luck
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Forgot these
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This poem came as great interest to me. It was thought provoking and read well right off the page.
Thank you for entering!
Síochán leat
~Mairéad~
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True words, for the most part (in my opinion.)
One thing is that the wording isn't perfect. It sounds like improper English in parts. However the general idea is great and so too is the structure.
Perfect ending also. Very well done.
Thank you for the entry and best of luck in my contest as well as the other contests this is entered into.
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Thoughtful and interesting read, my friend. I love the title you chose. It seems very personal and yet the text is so universally applicable. Self control and moderation in all things. Very good write. Best wishes in the contest. Peace, Rhonda
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