You say you will return
the drums of war sound
Why can't we run away
let someone else be brave.
the drums of war sound
Why can't we run away
let someone else be brave.
A contest entry
- admiration by Lavender Butterfly.
550 points, ended January 14, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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nice poem
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What a great take on the prompt... I didn't see it but you took that step to the side and illuminated meaning that blind eyes couldn't see. A terrific interpretation!
Ken
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Oh yes lets please run away...LOL...That would be my plea too. What a great job you did on this short piece. I just loved and best wishes in the contest.
Wishing You Many Blessings,
Much Love,
Kelle Marie
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A very good accompaniment to the picture prompt. Fitting!
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Such depth and emotion here... x
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Loving theCreative Flow
Surely precious the thoughts
you've penned...Vivid & direct
painting love.....excellent
....novy
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I think many of us feel this way, why can it not be someone ELSE? Awesome, though over 10 words
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Excellent!
This, my dear Ed, is excellent writing. I can see why you chose this direction based on the picture prompt: she looks rather forlorn, as though seeing a loved one off to war; which is never easy. It's as though you got into her head and read her pained thoughts. Of course, you did go over the 10-word limit.
If you were to shorten this, how about: "You say you will return. Can't another be brave?"
Still, I love it just as it stands and would love to see it garner the gold!
Luv & hugs, SisBon
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Beautiful Words
You have captured the essence of the picture quite well. A face seen on too many lately as their loved one goes off to war. Wonderful imagery. Alot said in a few words. A delight to read this morning. You take care.
Hugs and Smiles,
Sandy
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Lovely but I think you went over the 10 word limit
Gaylene
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Umb-Da
Yep that's me, backwards. In this case I read the directions backward. It was twenty poets and ten words, not twenty words and ten poets. Well, alack and alas.
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Well said words again my friend, the title is fitting with all of it. Blessings.
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