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Feed the Flame

Whispering flames explore darkness
listen as its tongue flickers
shaping words you don't understand

Feed the hungry, flaming lips
feel the warm embrace
surround you completely

Nurture it with carefulness
in fear of a chill
and starvation

...always remember the tiny
spark that started it all...


♥

Author notes

I still don't know if this is literal or not.
It could go either way - i leave it open to interpretation.

Thanks to magnetic poetry http://www.magpo.com/play.html
for sparking... my muse (no pun intended)


THIS SITE IS GREAT FOR CURING WRITERS BLOCK

I RECOMMEND IT LIKE A LOT- BOOKMARK IT!!!!!!!!!!!

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  • jayyniecakes.
    February 15
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    i likee...

    best of luck in my contest.


  • Flare the Arcphoenix
    January 17
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    Haha, no pun intended...yeah right! It's a good pun!

    I, just like anyone else I'm sure, get extremely tempted to relate this to love after the second stanza. Good relation, too - love can be very much like a fire...it can be quick to spark and die, but lasts a long time if you tend to it; it creates warmth and comfort from the cold outside, and if it's a real [or I guess, for analogy's sake, a 'roaring'] fire, it brings much light to the dark.

    Anyway, great write. T'was a pleasantly 'warming' read. ^_^

    --Flare
    o}--{=======>


    • Nakatrea
      January 17

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      I took the words from a love word bank but twisted them so it wasn't extremely dirty and horrifying

      I can be very punny sometimes.. lol
      but that one was an accident

      • Flare the Arcphoenix
        January 17

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        Good thing to do - there's plenty of dirty stuff out there already; it's nice to see one that isn't.

        Accidents can be good. ^_^

        • Nakatrea
          January 17
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          ya... i saw the words and was like.. this is sketchy...BUT PSYCH i'll make it not sketchy.

          and seriously book mark the link. Its AWESOME


  • Valley Girl silver member
    January 14

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    Awesome imagery and ending. I do like how this can be interpreted in may different ways. You have done a great job with this piece. Thanks for sharing.

    • Nakatrea
      January 14
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      Thanks! It made a word bank myself out of a love poem database (fridge magnet poetry site thing)

      and then I got the first stanza and another one that will be its own poem once its finished.

      Seriously bookmark the site. Its sooooo helpful!

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