Survival of internal genocide:
erroded memories,mishap-en
desires, gasping in empty sea.
dwelling upon minuscule
lanterns of tomorrow;
swimming upon
currents of dreams -
reaching surface,
as change does this:
open eyes while mind
overhauls a new background
and place-mats
totality.
A contest entry
- Reserve A Word...Paint A Poem Part 2 by poet2angels.
700 points, ended January 24, 15 entries
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Comments
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This is a splendid penning filled with exellent imagery and metaphor.
Love your ending on this piece, brilliant indeed.
Best to you in all you do.
Tony
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Excellent!
Unique style and I love the metaphor..
TY for entering!
Lynda
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Oh wow… emphasize that more…. W O W !!! utterly blown away- I was a little confused at first.. But then I recognized your style- you changed your name… tricky tricky
j/k lol I didn’t even notice until a moment ago 
“erroded memories,mishap-en
desires, gasping in empty sea.
dwelling upon minuscule
lanterns of tomorrow;” I am envious- you truly are a master of word craft. I have never known a more poetic heart. Just genius. -T
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I appreciate you
You make me shy with your comments...and I love that you recognize the style. i'm always trying to find my voice, funny its just there, but often more-then -not, insecurity creeps in, to serve a massive plate of doubt.
i appreciate you and your talent.
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I'M not sure how "Bask" is the right title for this poem.
"Plunge","erase" or even "mend" would seem more suited prompt words for your poem...but that doesn't diminish dizzying whirlwind effect of your poem on my mind!
The lines:
"dwelling upon minuscule
lanterns of tomorrow..."
make me feel like a lost child!
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Yeah, i just was going so random in this...not my best. i just wanted to release...I chose bask because at the end when in totality,
I just basked in it. -
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...in that case, the title suddenly makes much more sense!
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