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float





like ice cakes wide across the river

the clouds over Tantramar break and

drift upon blue beams of sky


having scattered their heavy load

they leave behind a gleam in Turner's eye







































Author notes

RE:Tantramar
Between Amherst, Nova Scotia and Sacville, New Brunswick the Tantramar Marsh sweeps down to the north-eastern corner of Fundy Bay. The marshs were drained with a very ambitious system of dikes and ditches by the Franch settlers until 1755 when, caught up in the struggles of the colonial Powers they became victims of the Acadian Deportaion. Many of them endes up in "La Nouvelle-Orléans" where some of them kept digging levees and canals.
In the middle of Tantramar is Fort Beauséjour a Canadian "National Historic Site"
with one of the grandest vistas of sea and sky in a nation who's motto is "A Mari usque ad Mare" ("From Sea to Sea").








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  • John Doe
    April 23

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    Excellent poem, I like the phrase "blue beams of sky" for several reasons but generally because there is so much going on in the sky and I think a lot of people just see the sky as something that is a backdrop for life on earth, but there is a lot of visual imagery, mystery, metaphor and drama in the sky that is equal to, or more interesting than, things on earth. The poem is like a painting. Is it Turner, the painter, in the poem?

  • ea silver member
    January 18

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    floating on dreams of ice breaking up - there's surrealist imagery I'm getting with this, though I probably would have gone with the root beer.


  • condor gold member
    January 17

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    This was beautifully written and the vivid picture you put across was wonderful. I love the way you described the clouds dumping their load and drift onward. Such wonderful words that you used to produce this excellent piece. The very best of luck in this contest.


  • poet2angels gold member
    January 16

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    Excellent! Thank you for the explanation in notes ! I love the metaphor and imagery here...
    TY for entering

    Lynda

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