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The Hue of Heaven Sent

I see the hue of Heaven sent

                        right before my eyes

Such perfection in it's gleam

                        of effervescence lies

It flows on wings of angles,

                        sheltering my soul

And though I've only visited,

                        it's hue has made me whole

I meandered towards it's brilliance

                        knowing only beauties grace

And wondered if I'm good enough

                        to feel it on my face

Then just as I stepped towards it

                        this miracle I saw

My soul began to fall again

                         as I reached for it in awe

And so the hue of Heaven sent

                         seems naught more than a dream

Though I hope that in the future

                         once more on my face will gleam 


 

Author notes

Can you guess where the mystery color was seen?

I chose no background image or colors because your imagination should color this poem.

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  • poeticweaver gold member
    February 6

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    Beautifully Inscribed!

    A poem that makes me ponder upon the white lights beaming bright as one might be walking into the pearly gates. I like how you took a prompt, and made it your own. Thanks for sharing, Peace. Timothy

  • RechercheCadaver
    January 30

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    I would have to guess that you saw either white or gold as these are the colors which are usually associated with divinity. I am not religious in the strict sense, so perhaps that is why the images do not really appeal to me emotionally. I feel that they do not transcend cultural values, do not translate the feeling of divinity into words, but that might just be because of cultural differences. What I like is that you described how ellusive this light can be. I think we all hope for some light to stay with us.


    • poeticcaresses
      January 31
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      This was written from a prompt and when I saw the prompt this is the image that came to mind imediately. I do not really find divinity in any color either but you often hear of these images from people who have had "near death" experiances and that is what inspired this piece.


  • Janice M Pickett
    January 28

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    A Lovely picture of contentment this gave me. very nicely done.


  • Lanasaur
    January 17

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    thankyou

    well done although i didnt want to make the poems religous good write though keep penning and good luck in my contest


  • Dark Otter
    January 16

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    White? Golden?

    I like the form, thought and the rhyme. I think that means I like the poem. It is an easygoing 'spiritual' piece that is well written and deserves the recognition that it gets. (P.S. It is my favorite of yours, keep that under your hat)


  • Ademon
    January 13

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    I think you've describe pure beauty and brilliance in this poem! I wish you the best in this contest, and regardless of what place you take, this is Golden to me!

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