One.
We go to the park, people look and think you'd be a bad parent, for no 600lb man could raise a little girl... but i knew other wise, i know we couldnt play like other kids, but you loved me and i loved you... i saw them talk and laugh "lets go home daddy"
Two.
I lay and wait... I know you'll be home to tuck me in.. so i lay awake.. I hear to come in and i hear you fight with mom... You come to my room... I pretend to sleep and not smell the alcohol on your breath... You kiss me and i "awaken"... "Welcome home daddy"
Three.
"Sadie, take your sister downstairs when the doctor comes in...", I go and pretend i dont know something is wrong... The hospital is silent... I take her to pray... We beg that nothing is wrong... We come back up to mommy crying... "Cancer."... Please just come home daddy.
Four.
I walk in the door... mom comes to embrace me for the first time in years... I can see the tears... I dont need to ask I know what has happened...I lean to her sholder and cry... "PLESE COME HOME DADDY!"
Five.
i sit on the couch... i stare at the door... hopin maybe you will walk in... you dont... I go to the funeral... I cry and I just keep thinking this is all just a dream... We come back home and i walk in the door... I look at you urn... "Are you really home now daddy?"
A contest entry
- vignettes by mayaa.
400 points, ended February 15, 5 entries
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so very sad but well done. i liked the progression...the was you took us through everything.
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i sit on the couch... i stare at the door... hopin maybe you will walk in... you dont... I go to the funeral... I cry and I just keep thinking this is all just a dream... We come back home and i walk in the door... I look at you urn... "Are you really home now daddy?"
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It's like you gradually realise what has happened over so many years but still can't reconcile.
The poem makes me feel so helpless. I like the numbers, children learn to count as they grow older in years
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Very pretty
Thoughts so sad are easily expressed in simple language and words.
Well Done.
You might want to look at your punctuation and spellings.
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