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Annabelle.

 

 

Annabelle lays sprawled across her dark bedspread

her charcoal lined eyes staring blankly out at nothing

a wisping cloud of smoke leaves her mouth

she exhales the puff of hash that she'd been holding in her throat

she sucks on the freshly rolled joint resting between her black nailed fingers

her mind wanders while playing the how-long-can-i-keep-it-in game

she welcomes the numbing burn that fills her lungs

 

Voices fill the hallway and a knock calls upon her bedroom door

brief panic crosses her hazed mind, then calm...

 

find me, I'm falling, catch me.

       

 

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Name Prompt: Annabelle

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  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    January 31, 2009

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    Thank You for Your Entry ~

    Annabelle seems so sad and lost ~

    I wanted to reach out and catch her as she fell further down; I could feel she was so sweet and young and didn't quite understand her life as she got older ... I really do like this

    ♥
    Best of Luck
    Stay safe
    ~Manda


  • broken-colours
    January 21, 2009

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    Interesting.
    Annabelle made me think of a little girl who liked to have tea parties with her stuffed animals when she was little. I like your take on her!
    Very great poem. :]


    • EverxEnding silver member
      January 21, 2009
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      Annabelle seems like such an innocent name, like you said.
      I wanted to make Annabelle the innocent little girl who grew up to be a rebellious teen crying out for help.
      Thank you for the read and comment. They mean a lot!


  • A n u k e t
    January 20, 2009

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    this is beautiful. i shall have to enter into these contests.

    i love the name inspired idea im getting for poems in my head =D


    • EverxEnding silver member
      January 21, 2009
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      Thanks I really like the idea too. I think it's really cool. You get to tell a story, make a judgment. I love it.


  • Lady Michaella
    January 16, 2009

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    this poem is so sad. generally when you think of the name annabelle, you think of a sweet child, and this poem shows that even those with a sweet name, can have a contrasted personality. this is excellent.
    x

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