It's a habit, this restless desire to say something meaningful when I think about my life, the endless turns and corners that echo the clacking of my mental red heels. When I think, I am sexy, and I cannot understand why you do not like that. It sometimes crosses my mind that maybe the reason you are so cold is because you are missing. The crack of the crickets' voices tell me you were never born, but I know somewhere,
a mother is crying in the sweat of lovelabor, the after-product of nightlights and lavender candles and silkworm sheets. I imagine someday that will be us, too, the same cardiac chase over soft wheat fields.
And when I think, I am sexy enough to leave you beating breathless so that your memory lungs are withering in the heat.
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Author notes
too long of a title? this is my second attempt at prose, and I think I'm doing quite well. 
In a list
A contest entry
- Prose or Vignette or Combine Both by mysticstorm.
700 points, ended January 15, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best Prewrites From January 2009 by amaranthine lover.
1125 points, ended March 4, 22 entries
Gold trophy winner
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of course that's how you're supposed to feel.
Comments
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someones very jealous. dang, that title is good!
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wonderful.
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This is just beautiful..and the scenario you shared is indeed very thoughtful as well..love it, the way it brings the depth..thanks for sharing..
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When I read your words I wish I had your talent. You seem to see the world from a step above . . . like you're living 30 seconds in the future and looking back at the rest of us wondering why we don't "get it." You just have a good way with words -- which is probably why you're writing!
Very well done.
Garrison
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This is beautifully penned
Your imagery provides such lovely metaphors
and no, I don't think your title is too long -
Love the wonderful metaphor in your write...strong and moving...excellent work in this style...I truly enjoyed.
Thank you for sharing!
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i love the softness of this -- gorgeous!
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Great Imagery Cassie!
I really liked this piece!
I see you got your muse back!!!
Keep writing!
~Annie
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"do not like that"
I kept reading it as 'don't, but then again...I am biased in favor of contractions for some reason.
"And when I think, I am sexy enough to leave you beating breathless so that your memory lungs are withering in the heat."
I wish I'd written that and I'm sincere when I say that; I especially love "memory lungs" and 'withering'...
and...
SEXY.
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Jessica
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Thankies.
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the second paragraph is amazing. love the imagery!
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Thanks!
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Certainly a differently style than i'm used to seeing from you Cass. Good job though, I like the way that the shortness of it doesn't take anything away from it.
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ahhh I wish I could take my new prose and work it into something longer, like a book.
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No need to think you are doing well at prose...you ARE doing it well and the title draws you in to see what it is about. Loved it
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