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Haunted

Stop
I can fell you on me holding me down
I'm trapped
Let me go
Why are you following me
looking at me
I have nothing inside me
hallow
Your heart is are inside my head
pounding 
making me crazy
your haunting me

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Haunted

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  • EiramDK
    January 13

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    OOoo, I love Haunted. I like the way you portray that you are trapped and can't get away. But it needs the Pow! The potential is there, but I think It could be expanded or a thesaurus could be used in it. Such as lines 5 and 6.