Haunting eyes now still see
The love we once shared
Lost dreams now forbidden
Hearts that no longer care
You turned and you fled
When love danced in my eyes
Walking out of the door
With lost tears that I cried
So now I am haunted
By that which is lost
Green eyes stained with sorrow
Heart covered in frost
Author notes
Pictuare by Diana Faith, Option What she is thinking
A contest entry
- Out of the picture. Prompt. by morgana raven.
400 points, ended January 15, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Hood-Wink!
The end is great, touches our hearts and made me feel so close to the situation you described...a good description to the downside of love. The last two unique lines stand out by giving this poem impact...
You have been Hood-Winked by a Poetic Bandit
All the best...
~Lilac
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this is beautiful
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A very heartfelt poem I and many others can relate to. Especially the line, green eyes stained with sorow. Your poems are so filled with emotions. They always touch my heart in some way. You take care my friend. Bless you always.
Hugs and Smiles,
Sandy
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I like the wording of this poem. Please put which choice you opted for in your author notes thank you.
Thanks for entering and good luck.
Laura -
Green eyes stained with sorrow
Heart covered in frost
5 Stars, 2 Thumbs Up and a Standing Ovation!
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very clever, and a very relatable poem to anyone who has ever gone through heartbreak... I especially like the last two lines, the analogy is great. Good job!
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