Darkness
Dark
Enfolds,
Enchanting
Hiding all from
Pain
Freedom
Final act of those who have fallen,
Return unto whence you came,
Enter here those who battle demons
Enter here those who wish to remain sane.
Despair not for those who call,
Of their fate I know for sure
Mouthing secret syllables they have fallen past salvation.
Love
Love marks, leaving message
That shall never hark, or age.
Author notes
wow...I didnt think I could do this but I think some of the poems that came out of it are great.
A contest entry
- Three in One Forms Contest (for The Poetic Bandits Group Only) by The Poetic Bandits.
1000 points, ended January 15, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - AP X Factor 2 - Auditions by sideways hourglass.
550 points, ended February 27, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
hope you like it pls use constructive critism
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Hey, you have made it through.
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No
Acrostics will be irrelevant to this contest, honestly -- like, that's just not something we will be covering. Even with that pushed aside here, what you have is not enough. I'm looking for something that has more imagery to pick and at least some metaphor in it. Poetic devices will be significant, but that is what this poem lacked. Just my opinion.
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Yes.
Form-wise you did very well, yet I felt the content to be somewhat bland and lifeless. Your ability to manipulate form and stay within the disciplines of its confines is what swung my vote here.
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You have done very well with these form poems. Your presentation is pleasing to the eyes and your words are well chosen.
The Lanturne is a bit haunting, got my attention and gave me something to ponder.
The Acrostic is well written and very meaningful. One thing you should check is the spelling of the third word of the last line, I believe you might want to use the word syllables.
The Essence though short speaks volumes. Very nice!
The overall package is very good! Well done!
Brother Dennis
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Thank you, that was very helpfull, I really aprecciate that you like it.
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Thank you for entering the Bandit Group Contest! I really like how you have made these tell a story by the themes very nicely done, and my favourite was the acrostic - especially the last line - chilling!
Keep writing
Polly
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Hey this was great to read. You have a right to be proud of your work, I really liked this. The beginning made me draw into the poem and it wasn't what I was expecting.
Its beautiful but in a dark way.
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thats what I do, beautifull darkness
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