Masked dancers twirling past,
A world full of contrast,
Holding my shadow partner dear,
I brush off a silver tear,
Our moving feet, leaving a track,
Throughout this ballroom, all black,
One final waltz before the end,
before our parallel roads we ascend,
One last glance at your face,
Then we must leave this place,
As the midnight bell does chime,
We unclasp our hands, for the last time,
Author notes
Love charley
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A contest entry
- the audition round. by stargazer..
800 points, ended May 21, 54 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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thiz iz another amazing piece... your syle nd use of vocab iz amazing once again wel done
sry i hav no mor clappiez but i wud giv you three -
Wow i really liked it =]
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i like it.
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Originality: (8/10)
Emotion: (7/10)
Poetic devices: (14/20)
Structure/flow: (8/10)
Cohesion: (8/10)
Title relating to poem: (10/10)
Personal opinion: (8/10)
Syntax: (7/10)
Diction: (8/10)
Total: 78/100 -
Originality: (8/10)
Emotion: (7/10)
Poetic devices: (15/20)
Structure/flow: (7/10)
Cohension: (8/10)
Title relating to poem: (10/10)
Personal opinion: (7/10)
Syntax: (6/10)
Diction: (7/10)
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i really liked this
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Well written
I like this one, the movement of the poem echoes of rhythym and of course a current of romance throughout. Well done.
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This completely describes my relationship with a guy. I feel like this alot. Great Job.
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awww hunni, this is beautiful and I'm sure she loves it. I think you need to talk to her again, even if it is just as friends, and not right away, but dont cut her out your life forever, that will just hurt both of you.
lova ya twin
Hollie
x
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