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amidst rubble's sigh

 

 

 

 

 

They labelled decomposing dreams

as mere bullshit

that beat blames

beneath copper-coloured clouds

and clung loosely--

 

like ancient flesh

to bone

 

within harms

of soul's sacred walls,

lacerating love

to banish bruised beliefs.

 

They painted the star of david

on unspent summers

and aimed shames, to slosh

in watery shoes.

 

He rushed blues tunes

along articles

of feigned admirations

and lost concentration

in the pollution of snow...

 

and as black boots

belittled winter,

courage caught

once compressed cries

in bloodless facts--

 

he omitted tact

when he laced loathing

across the severity

of betrayal's smell.

 

She echoed gutter-mouth slurs

to brimming rage,

etching escape in blurred breaths;

simultaneously straightening spine

to whistle strength

at walking-away styles.

 

He erected self

to deliver a tirade of abuse,

amusing lanky steps

with cruelty's requirements

and precise moments

perished

in hidden pieces

of pride's pretence.

 

She searched breezes

for release,

conducting craziness

through dirty holes

 

and stitched the moon

to her disappointments

 

whilst he gathered remnants

of ruin

and tightly took to looking good;

slowly smearing sorrow

upon tomorrow's chest--

 

empty glory had frozen future,

while sordid slumbers

deprived destiny...

 

of angular aches.

 

 

 

 

 

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  • This is better than the other poems. without reading the others, i'm sure.


  • chloris
    January 20

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    i agree with the comment below... i loved the alliterations but they were a bit distracting at some points. i loved
    "She echoed gutter-mouth slurs
    to brimming rage," .. this creates a remarkable image. thanks for entering.


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    January 14
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    Gosh... this is almost angry... anger from gentle images.

  • SoulWhispher
    January 13

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    This is a most moving poem, it just simmers with emotions, both good and bad, it turns the soul inside out and moves the reader. I found this to be fantastic, great job, blessings with love John